Smitten

The first time I held my little puppy.

The first time I saw you,

I knew I was smit,

You shook me to pieces,

I near had a fit.

Now that I've found you,

You've got to be mine,

Mountains of gold,

Can't compare with this find.

You tear me to pieces,

When I look in your eyes.

Deep down inside;

I can feel butterflies.

Momma dog loving,

Her cute little pup.

I'm telling you, cutie,

You're tearing me up.

 

 

Reviews

[GentleGenille]

Very soft, light piece. Flowed very well. Nice change from the more heavy stuff I usually read. Lovely!

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I like the light hearted approach you took to love, I dig the dog analogy. It flowed well, and the pace was great.
I had a smile on my face as I read this, and I thank you for that. The world needs to smile and laugh more....

[Emily B]

I refer to the time when pets began coming into my home as "when I lost my mind." Wouldn't trade the dog and the cats and the occasional snails and crawdads for anything.

[Fran Marie]

A sweet touching write rendered so tenderly ~Well DonE!~Fran Marie

[Sea Dreams ~marina~]

Cute and fun is the best way I can describe this. It put a smile on my face. Love the light-heartedness and rhyme scheme. Nicely done, friend.
- M

[Ladysue]

Norma, this was very touching and tender piece. Great feelings and a wonderful write.

[Pema Dorje]

smiles and giggles with this little Love Poem, a sweet rendering from a sweet heart ...

[Robert Luna]

I loved the flow of this and tenderness that drips from every line. I could a heart beat thumping in the words. You have a great ability to write with your heart. I always love to see that in someone's work.


Wonderfully Done!!!!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Nice to see a soft and eloquent write, sharing a tender moment of canine appreciation. Well done!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Thea M. Joy]

aww Norma, this is so cute. The rhyming works great! Thanks so much for sharing this one with me! It actually brightened my day! :)