If I Can't Have His Love

Lyrics I wrote sometime back.

She walked into the barroom, where he sat with Nelly Mae,

She looked them over closely, and then I heard her say;

You're a mighty pretty woman, and he's such a foolish man,

And if I can't have him lady, then nobody can.

If I can't have his love, and his arms around me tight,

If I can't have him home with me, instead of here at night,

If I can't give him what he needs, to prove he is a man;

If I can't have him lady, then nobody can.

 

The tears were falling from her eyes, she trembled as she spoke;

The only thing you care about, is a barroom filled with smoke,

I saw the glisten of the gun, held tightly in her hand,

She looked at him and whispered, I hope you understand.

If I can't have your love, and your arms around me tight,

If I can't have you home with me, instead of here at night,

If I can't give you what you need, to prove you are a man,

If I can't have you baby, then nobody can.

 

He just sat and looked at her, there was nothing he could say,

He knew he had to pay the price, for the love he'd gave away,

She pulled the trigger and he fell at her feet there on the floor,

And I strained to hear the words she spoke as she walked out the door.

I tried to warn you baby, I'm not the fooling kind,

But you wouldn't listen, Just wanted what was mine.

Now you belong to no-one,for you lie dead and still,

No, if I can't have you baby, Nobody ever will.

 

Reviews

[Jonathan Cordova]

Well.. It took a while but i got around to reading this piece... and let me say i think im a little afraid of you now... teehee j/k... but seriously, totally reminds me of a dixie chicks song or something, I could totally hear the modern country rock stylings of this... its got all it needs a message and flow and a purpose... you should consider getting someone to try and sing it... or sing it yourself ( dont know if your musically inclined but heck try it anyway!!!) but i digress it was a fun little read for me keep up the great work!

[Pema Dorje]

wow... ever listen to Nick Cave's Murder Ballads? 'Where the Wild Roses Grow' is the other side of this lyrical write of yours...

[Bubo]

A great story........almost lyrical!
I loved the words she spoke and the way he calmly accepts his fate.........

If I can't have your love and your arms around me tight,

If I can't have you home with me instead of here at night,

If I can't give you what you need to prove you are a man,

If I can't have you baby, then nobody can."

Perfect flow................pretty scary these things actually happen............

[Silvia - Scribo, Ergo S..]

Em is right ... this DOES sound like an old mountain ballad ... I hear some Bluegrass tune here. xxx

[John Stussy]

I wonder if that was what was going through my mom's head...

[Kathryn Ann]

Man am i sorry it took my so long to getting around ro reading this piece. Do you realize how good this is ?!?!? Amazing Amazing Amazing. Wonderful flow ... well written... i have absolutley no corrections or tips for you on this one. Keep writing

[V. Lucien Maier]

nicely written. well done.

[Gordon Greene]

Missed you around the Cafe'.
This is quite the lyrical piece to come back on with! Probably be a good one for Reba or Tammy... Not the Shania type of tune (that is a compliment, you know).

Good work. Flawless lyrics.
Gordon

[Sea Dreams ~marina~]

Wow!! That's gotta hurt!
Love the rhyming throughout and the flow. Very well written. Hope this is fiction, ouch!
Nicely done!
- M

[Emily B]

It has the feel of an old mountain ballad. Like Barbara Allen or some other tragic love story gone wrong. It's very nice.