You're Really Not Alone

A plea to someone depressed.

Why do you dwell on problems,
And revel in your pain,
Fill your thoughts with sorrows;
Until you go insane?

 

Why does the smile you wear,
Hide sadness underneath?
No one seems to notice,
You go through so much grief.

 

Why try to hide your pain away,
It cannot be disguised.
Although you try to cover it;
I can see it in your eyes.

 

Why do you feel so distant?
Be strong instead of weak.
Your sadness pulls you further,
From the happiness you seek.

 

I wish that you could realize,
Your hopes and dreams aren't gone.
Stop walking down a dead-end road.
You're really not alone.

 

I'm standing right beside you,
I never have lost sight.
I share your hopes and dreams,
I'm here to help you fight.

 

Please think of what you're doing,
Together we can find a way,
To get you through this darkness;
Into the sunlight of the day.

Reviews

[Jemma]

Great write. You captured the view of how people see depressed people very well. But you did it from the point of view of someone that actually cares. Someone that seems a little confused and 'oblivious' to what is going on. Sometimes you can't see into peoples heads. Sometimes you just have to wait until they are ready to show you. Like I said. Great write. It came off the page for me.

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is a beautiful heart felt write that show that there are people that really do care. In this stunning prose you have shared love and inspiration. It is sad as so many people are in such obvious in distress, as you wisely write
" Although you try to cover it;
I can see it in your eyes"
It would be a better world if we lived this stanza as a Mantra for each day...
"I'm standing right beside you,
I never have lost sight.
I share your hopes and dreams,
I'm here to help you fight."
Thank you for reaching out to that special person, as I am sure that this piece touched many! ~ Jude :-) xo

[David Lewis Paget]

Yes, a very nice supportive message to someone who is lost, and without hope. You've chosen a good stable rhythm for this piece as well, not too slow, and certainly not jaunty - but strong and measured. The rhythm should always match the mood, and your choice of using quatrains was the correct and obvious one. If I was going to be deliberately obtuse, to find something to criticize, the only point I can see are the lines - 'Although you try to cover it;
It shines right through your eyes.'
When we talk about something 'shining' through the eyes it's usually a positive thing, a joyous thing. I would imagine that pain would be more likely to dull the eyes - 'It more than dulls your eyes' I would have thought a truer line. But full marks, nevertheless, for a compassionate look at depression.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Awe that is really beautiful... full of hope and guidance and more importantly support... we all need someone sometimes for life has many pitfalls and we can't always face them alone. Wonderfully inspiring work.

[Mary-Anne]

Its really good but it seems the person writing this does not see how bad depression can be but it is an interesting point of view. It has stayed in my mind.