Poured My Heart Out

 

I poured my heart out, in the rain,

Emptied out my hurt and pain,

I know not from or where it came;

But know, I'll never be the same.

 

I tossed my dreams into the sun,

And watched them dying one by one,

And when the final dream was gone;

I knew I faced the world alone.

 

I watched my faith,it slipped away,

I fell down on my knees to pray,

I had no strength to carry on;

For grief had stripped me to the bone.

 

My life lay crippled on the road,

I saw the seeds that sorrow sowed,

As truth lay bleeding on its side;

I  hung my head and gently cried.

 

My friends, I begged them all to stay,

But one, just laughed and turned away,

How tragic that she could not see;

How much her friendship meant to me.

 

I watched my dreams, my faith, all die,

All I could do was sit and cry,

Until a friend,  my faith renewed;

By saying, "I believe in you."

 

My spirit now has reached new height,

I feel I have the strength to fight,

And all because a friend did care;

And showed me love was always there.

Reviews

[C.T. Bailey]

Sometimes, a true friend is like a rare gem...very hard to find, but their value is priceless. Beautiful writing Norma. Very inspiring for the person who is feeling a little beat down right now. As always, you are an encourager. Check spelling, last stanza, first word..."My". Very nice piece!
Todd

[jen -- JG]

Thank you for this piece of beautiful writing - it has turned a nasty day of mine into something a lot better. As always you have the right turn of phrase and the encouraging words - and as always - someone needs to find that 'bottom' before becoming re-newed - reborn - refreshed and ready to start again. It only takes one to drive in the stake but it also only takes one to offer a hand and trust and faith can live again.

Well done love - well done.

[The Flawed]

I really like your work, its great writing.
I have a poem "a chat with dad" that starts exactly the same way

[Ladysue]

This was a beautiful piece of work. I love the message within and it was written with such heartfelt emotion. It is amazing what the words "I believe in you" can do for a person. It is a true gift! A wonderful write my friend!

[Wildecat]

Nothing beats a friend who cares and love does make the world go round.

[Robert Luna]

It is always so great to get a chance to read your writing as I love your story telling abilities. You always provide such a wonderful assortment of details to bring the words to actual life. Seeing them being acted out there in front of me with the clarity I so love from your writing. You allow us as the reader to dwell in your words but also leave enough out to give our own imaginations the chance to envision a deeper story that lies there in between the words that are written. You are always such a pleasure to read and have rolling around in my head for a bit.


Great Job!!!!!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Did you ever notice, when someone asks 'How are you?' we instinctively answer 'fine thanks', even when we're not. And, if we tell the truth, when our situation is in dire straits, those same individuals just don't want to know.

It takes a particular kind of companion; a true and dedicated friend, to reassure and support, when we are low on 'hope'.

Your composition encapsulates the essence of such a comradeship, when we need it the most. An excellent, compassionate and poignant write!

Blessings
Phill(ozofee)

[Antony]

Norma this is exceptional, perfect flow with your rhyming, what a great job you did with this, each stanza was tearfully felt, you poured everything from your heart out onto the page with such emotion. How wonderful to know that a friend pulled you up and believed in you. Very encouraging.
Tony

[bluessadmood]

I tossed my dreams into the sun,
And watched them dying one by one,
And when the final dream was gone;
I knew I faced the world alone....
...
I watched my dreams, my faith, all die,
All I could do was sit and cry,
Until a friend, my faith renewed;
By saying, "I believe in you.",what lovely words ,its like a song,when we lose faith ,when we toss our dreams one by one to the sun,and face the world alone,a friend belief in me renewed my strength and i can fight again,what lovely words ,lovely feeling ,thoughts on life ,when we are feeling down ,you tell it so good ,i just loved it all ,wonderful

[David Lewis Paget]

Norma J., I am impressed!!!! Your talent and ability with rhyme and metre seems to be growing out of all proportion these days. You must be getting inspiration from somewhere! There's only one dud line in the whole poem - 'That they were falling into hell.' I think you know you could improve on that. There's a nice bit of alliteration in - 'I saw the seeds that sorrow sowed', and the lines -
'I tossed my dreams into the sun,
And watched them dying one by one' -

well... I wish I had written that. Marvellous!

[BrightEyes]

there is a point in life I think everyone finds themselves here; and it is always here where you learn who your friends are. They are the ones who stand by you, do their best to bring comfort, but also offer that hand to help lift you up, beyond where you are, back to where you should be. never losing faith in you ...never turning their back or walking away. an amazing write :)

*hugs*

laura