Dreams of Mountains

my Muse is Sea, Mountain and Sky - Did you watch the blood Moon total Lunar Eclipse last night? It was wondrous -- Feb 21 2008

I watched the blood red lunar eclipse last night
until the face of the Goddess Luna turned white.

Then I meditated on this celestial event
looking for a gleaning of what this meant.

Upon further reflection I have to say
I could not fathom the meaning today.

So I rode my bike up the mountain to the sky
and flew back down and wondered why

the mountain dreams in streams rushing to the sea
where the waves are all gathering and disagree

about the many splendoured Suns glittering around
and whether they are jewels the mountain found.

Author's Note

my Muse is a Daemon flickering between bye bye and the shimmer on a flowers petals like diamonds of light - sHe is an Angel beating wings tipped in tears and laughter coming between a heart beat and intense disinterest always flirting with my Dreams - sHe stumbles upon Worldly Words but has a didactic memory when sHe sings - often sHe is aMusing me as much as I am aMused by sHe - alluring is the way sHe reads out loud and sHe will speak in tongues in your inner ear while smiling at you for losing your train of thought - sHe is fickle and measures the shape of your heart with how much awe you've beat it with today -

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

I loved both your poem and note......... equally both great writings.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A lovely beautiful writing. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Steven Williams]

I really enjoyed this. Terrificly well-written and I loved the last four lines:

the mountain dreams in streams rushing to the sea
where the waves are all gathering and disagree

about the many splendoured Suns glittering around
and whether they are jewels the mountain found.

~Stephen

[TL Boehm]

even your note sparkles effervescent with stellar light. wonderfully done. I missed the eclipse as it was cloudy in the desert, but I can imagine it through your words.

[C. Harter Amos]

I enjoyed your author's note as much as, maybe more than I did your poem. The eclipse was amazing & your poem paints a picture of the awe I felt. Searching for meaning was like questioning where love comes from or why it's there at all. I like this version better than the first "Dreams of Mountains" though the first one made me pause & ponder. Your author's note is a beautiful prose piece on your Muse. "sHe will speak in tongues in your inner ear while smiling at you for losing your train of thought - sHe is fickle and measures the shape of your heart with how much awe you've beat it with today." Love it. - Mimi.

[Vanessa Whiteley]

I love the imagery in this one. The rhyme is simple and not intrusive. The couplets work well and the voice seems light even playful. I was going to write that the last couplet was my favourite but the more I read this, I love them all.

[JC Fox]

Great poem I loved the visuals and there was something real sensual about this piece

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Spectacular imagery in this work...it truly was a miraculous occurence one I have not seen since childhood and she turned into the S(o)un it seemed. Another celestial being. Wonderful write. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Touché Armada]

It seems funny to me that we saw the full lunar eclipse on Aug. 28th 2007, and then all this time latter the other side of the world gets to see it.

"but all disagree

about the many splendoured suns glittering around
and whether they are jewels the mountain found"

This made me giggle, they may well not be suns, and the sun would know, because as soon as they are out of sight that no longer shine, a mere reflection, much like the moon and the earth, only alight in the sun.

I kind of get other little giggles in this write Jerry, but I'll just laugh in the inside in varied degrees.

Very much a pretty little ditty my friend.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wonderfully written, Jerry. Beautiful.


Great Write.
Rayne