This thing

its a poem which focuses on the realisation that there is a being who actually lives in a physical being known as a human. the poem tries to reveal the tussel between the outer and inner worlds!!!!!!!

i tried to look deep down inside me

there i just found this thing that needed to flee

this thing, i dont know how to name it

neither do i know, how to control or frame it

in this blazing physicality all around me

i see that thing has its blossom, and a tree

but this world of unending influence

i see the tree burning with some effluence

whenever i intended to water it

i was declared a big mis fit

the tree is burning with not even a leaf shredded

i think its roots can never be flooded!!!!!

the fire is the fuel to its strengthening

it can be termed as the beginning of a beginning!

only some have the eyes with a widened vision

only they see the tree and its flame without fission!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Junaid altaf

Author's Note

just speak the truth about wat u felt about this poem!

Reviews

[beyondpen]

I liked your poem especially how you've gone about portraying a vivid picture of this thing inside you, which i personally see as Creativity... one does get bogged down by external influences, but i think the internal fire is enough to keep the creative impulses alive ... however, one must also be open to constructive criticism :)
All in all, a wonderful poem...

[junaid altaf]

thanks for ur response and a meaningful advice..............

[junaid altaf]

thanks for the review....

[Moniba]

I liked the beginning half of it.. Then it just lost me.

[Sarah Redigan]

Just be u... nice write

[junaid altaf]

thanks sarah

[Sarah Redigan]

Yw

[junaid altaf]

for the reee view

[Rogue]

What I took away from this..
This thing is your individuality. What makes you different. It does not want to conform to the ideal, but march to it's singular drum and speak in a voice all it's own.

This is merely how I perceived it. A very nice write. :)

[junaid altaf]

you perceived it right....i m highly unconventional............thanks

[Purplerose]

Beautiful images you have brought here. :)

[junaid altaf]

thanks......

[lee von cleef]

smell,taste,hear,abraid,contain,lead,confuse,slap.....surprise.give them the bull fight, then buy dinner....

But all in all I like your flaming bush.

[junaid altaf]

thanks a lot