Rabbit Hole

5/28/15

I slipped,

I fell,

I lost this round

I won't get up on my own

For a while

But still 

this is a way 

That I must fight alone

Love me while I'm down

But do not take responsibility

For any pain

I may change,

Become something

You cannot understand

But the girl I've been

Is the girl I love

She might be gone now

But she will come back

Stay by my side

I'm fighting it

Resisting the urge

To devolve 

I don't want to be

In this hole again

It only hurts me

If nothing else,

I will end this

Or die trying

Reviews

[Wall of Words]

This is a nice new kind of love poem. For one, I like that you talk in I. Constantly reading love poems that talk about the main subject's love for another can get old. Second, I enjoyed the fact that your referring tot he bad times. Not just the time after a breakup or a physical separation, but an actual time when things are going bad for one person or another in the relationship and you can't see the light on the other side of the tunnel. And, finally, I like how the poem has a deeper meaning that isn't stated of the fact that the lover is helping the main character get through her (it is a her, right?) trials. She doesn't say it, but the meaning is there and that implication makes the poem that much more beautiful and emotional.
As always, fantastic job. :)
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