Life Line

It must have been fate...

Long fingers met through the kiss of 

Soft keystrokes

While softer still

Were rich baritone and mezzo-soprano voices

That reached across boundaries

In hopes of a fleeting kiss

To tide them for another year longer.

Her one, indivisible soul melted

To reveal desire and hearty lust

That grabbed for her spirit

And fought for her "whole"

Under a bright moon sky

Where under the stars they saw the same.

From a sea of foaming words

A dormant goddess lay,

Named possibility

Who brought fate to

A damsel of modern fragility

And a new Adam of Eden's Garden.

It must have been fate...

For two flames ignited

And the oppressive voices sang

It must have been fate.

Reviews

[Quest101]

By just reading this poem, i feel like I'm in love with you! Haha, just kidding. Not about the poem though; your work speaks to the deepest ends of my soul, and makes everything else feel like a blur. Don't get the wrong idea, though@! THIS IS NOT A LOVE CONFESSION! ^_^

[Riley Bray]

Haha thanks for the outgoing compliment XD I appreciate it. Thank you so so much for that! You flatter me. Thanks for the review and thanks for stopping by, I'll be sure to look at some of the things you've written too next time I get the chance. =^~^=

[Isabelle Faye]

Wow! You've outdone yourself Riley, this is an amazing poem! It's fully of compelling similes and metaphors that add layers of rich images to your meaning. Your lyrical style guides the reader to read on, creating a soft flow of words that is both visually pleasing and meaningful. Good job!!!

[Riley Bray]

Thanks for the review Isabelle, always nice to see you. ^-^ Send a request my way the next time you post something.

[Tai Ryens]

I find this to be the tale of two elderly lovers fighting both for their love and against death simultaneously, laying on their beds trying to maintain good health and avoid death, hence the first three stanzas and the title; accompanied by the remaining stanzas, I interpret that as the metaphors formulated within their imaginations, making do with the time they have left . . . And fate has united the duo, although for fairly little amount of time. Well done.

[Riley Bray]

Interesting take, I hadn't thought about it like that but with that in mind you're right! Thanks for the review Tai. I suppose this could go to a lot a elderly lovers minds, perhaps the song "Say Something" by A Great Big World and Christina Aguilera would suit this. Thanks again. xP

[Noah]

I wonder who it's about... Very lucky person

[Riley Bray]

Hun I wrote it in front of you XD Aishiteiru. ^^

[Noah]

Welll pssssssh love you too hun xD ^~^