Captivating

You were different with me, even when we first met.

He had a sad smile.

His eyes reflected painful memories

As if he could bury them deep inside.

His hands were tanned and balled into tight fists

As if he could hold his heart in his palm.

His mouth was soft but rigid

As if he could hide himself in its shadow.

His soul was incomplete and wavering

As if inside he was not who he tried to be.

He was captivating.

But he had a sad smile.

Reviews

[FateDictates]

I am just loving what you do with words, such a unique refreshing honest open slightly quirky style..Made my night..curtsy bow thank you

[Savior of Time]

This was very captivating to me.. EH?! GET IT?! No? okay.. anyway, I really liked how you described the person in this poem. Awesome job, Riley! :)

[Riley Bray]

XD Lol nice Willa XD Thanks for the review!

[Tai Ryens]

Finding captivation in the face of a lover despite a smile heavy with the woes of a past must be one of the most touching aspects of human nature in existence; to be able to find satisfaction and settle the storms of a past is lovely as well. You depict the meaning well, I liked it.

[Riley Bray]

Thank you much Tai.

[Amaya Sullivan]

This is pretty! Kind of ironic for my as my ten year high school reunion will be coming up soon. It reminds me of the group of friends I was around. Very nostalgic. ^_^

[Riley Bray]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it. :3

[Lina Grey]

Reminds me of a number of old friends of mine. I love the imagery and the contrasts in each stanza. Beautiful hun :)

[Riley Bray]

Thanks Lina. :) Nice to see you again by the way. ^^

[Lina Grey]

Nice to see you too! I hate being cut off from wc, but I'll be back soon enough aye ^_^