Little Girl, Maybe

She stores our youth in the back of our minds so if ever we want to dig into it, it is ready.

There's a little girl, far away

And quietly, does she lay

And on certain days, lucky days

When she sings and she dances and wildly plays

In Eve's garden outside in many ways,

Love is sprung, from an ocean,

Deep within, our emotions,

Oh sweet divine, devotions

Still our brainless commotion,

And set free the formula of the ecstasy potion.

She fools currents into changing

Forces sadness to start rearranging

Switches lust for love and want for need, exchanging

Constantly gauging (us)

All the while she's never aging,

And she resides

Where lay dormant our minds

Where not can we fathom her kind

So incredibly refined

For positivity raw and undefined.

Her soul swift and escaping

Untouchable and gaping

Over me, her spell is draping

Small body reshaping

And despite all, barely scraping (by).

There's a little girl,far away

And quietly, does she lay.

Where love is sprung, from an ocean,

Stilling our brainless commotion.

She fools currents into changing

Forces sadness to start rearranging.

And she resides

Where lay dormant our minds.

Her soul swift and escaping

And despite all, barely scraping (by).

There's a little girl, maybe,

If you allow yourself to find her.

Reviews

[.Em.]

I'm not very good at writing reviews but I know what touches me and this poem did just that

[Riley Bray]

Thank you very much Emmanuella, that's very nice of you. :)

[Riley Bray]

Oh! I'm glad you liked it, by the way. xP

[quinfinn]

what you have accomplished here is not easy to do, and even though a couple of your rhymes feel slightly forced, they all work quite well and you have achieved the improbable with a rhyme at the end of every line...then there's that last, long stanza followed by a single couplet...changes the game plan some, but by no means ruins the theme or the rhythm of this piece.... i would have made the last line say "if you allow yourself to find her"...but that is me, not you....a good write!

[Riley Bray]

Haha I thought you'd point out those forced rhymes. :P Putting that aside though I'm glad you liked it!

[minnie:)]

This is really good, it sounds like happiness and joy. This is a great poem :) I loved it :p

[Riley Bray]

Thank you! X3

[RyanXIII]

Really lovely poem Riley i like the concept its almost like happiness is out of reach if you dont let it in. keep it up.

[Riley Bray]

That's precisely what I was trying to say! Thanks for the review

[Isabelle Faye]

Great job! I love the lyrical yet poetic way you've phrased this poem. It has a strong imagery and your word choice really serves to further the concepts presented. Good write!

[Riley Bray]

Thank you much!!!