Just A Human Being

I have a sinking feeling that there's nothing left that I can do

I'm just a human being

Ready to take the blame again

But I am barely seeing

A reason to stick around my friend

And I'm just hoping sometime soon

I'll find a dream to dream with you

And maybe we can live anew

But until then I'll wait and bid a fond adieu.

I'm just another dreamer

Waiting for something true as truth

A rock solid demeanor

That will be quite hard to break through

And I'm just hoping sometime soon

I'll find a dream to dream with you

And maybe we can live anew

But until then I'll wait and bid a fond adieu.

Don't be scared,

I'm here,

But not for much longer.

Close your eyes,

Nothing to fear,

You'll be getting stronger.

And I'm just hoping sometime soon

I'll find a dream to dream with you

And maybe we can live anew

But until then I'll wait and bid a fond adieu.

I have a sinking feeling

That there's nothing left I can do

My mind and heart are reeling

And right now I have no real muse

And I'm hoping sometime soon

I'll find a dream to dream with you

And maybe we can live anew

But until then I'll wait and bid a fond adieu.

Reviews

[Spoon]

The repeated "chorus" (as it was quite rhythmic) gives me a sense of several repeated efforts or several "last chances" that haven't come to anything. It is quite sad, but I empathize as I too have been in that situation where you can't abandon someone who is using you. And you say goodbye many times, too many times.
This speaks to me deeply. If this is not your intended message than I guess it has more meaning than you meant, as that is the way it reads to me.
I hope you can resolve these feelings, even though they have birthed this amazing poem.

[Riley Bray]

You got it right. :) I thank you for reviewing.

[Shivam Murari]

"I'll find a dream to dream with you" That's such a painful line,Riley, that you speak to your selfish non-adjusting friend. A friend for whom you would do a lot, but they are not ready to do anything for you. You'll fly yourselves to emotional places you've never been and the friend would just put you down. You deserve someone better. Very nice poem :)

[Riley Bray]

People stay around those we think we deserve Shivam. Thanks for the review. :)

[Shivam Murari]

And that, indeed, is the sadder part. Welcome :)

[Jeremia]

I enjoy this piece. I think you did well.

[Riley Bray]

Thank you. :)

[Isabelle Faye]

I really like this piece. I especially like the line:

"I'm just another dreamer
Waiting for something true as truth,"

It describes the mentality of dreamers and hopeless romantics alike in such accuracy. This is a solid write and I think it will sound even better if you sing it!

[Riley Bray]

Haha you have to help me out with recording it, but I would gladly do so! Glad you liked it!!

[quinfinn]

i see a pattern here which suggests a song...this is very good in concept, there is some rhyming issue going on but it doesn't deter from the impact of the piece, it does flow and strongly enough that the rhyme doesn't get lost..well penned.

[Riley Bray]

Haha sorry about the rhyming problem. :P Any place its specifically terrible? Thanks for the review and the criticism. :)

[quinfinn]

the last line of the second stanza really jumps out, other than that it is very doable.

[Riley Bray]

Haha okay okay, I'll fix that. Thanks for telling me. :)