Raven Girl

And she, the vulnerable raven girl, becomes a graveyard.

She is the raven girl.

Said to be constructed of dank feathers

Of the ominous black bird that symbolizes death.

Ebony black hair cascading in wispy flourishes

Down her pale, parchment-like skin

And colorless funeral style gown.

In her hand a black rose remains clutched

Apparent evidence of her void heart

And the poison slithering around her veins, killing her slowly, softly.

But she is not entirely without emotion,

For she holds her beloved ravens close,

The only living creature that shares her remorse.

She stands idly by an old,

Long dead and barren tree,

In the middle of a long dead and barren wasteland.

On which skeletons lie

Half submerged, half protruding,

And hungry insects sucking greedily on their exposed brains.

She is an avid believer in justice, as well as revenge

And if ever she could take flight,

She would reap it on all those who inhabit the same planet as her and her beloved ravens.

On bloody nights

With scarlet dusk's

And crimson dawns,

Tainted plasma rains from her empty eyes,

Dripping into the cracked earth,

Bringing with it a feather from her coal colored hair.

And each night, she will stand before the pure white moon,

Painfully searching icy waters for a reason for her existence

And finding none other than to scare children into submission.

But she means no harm,

Not unless you harm her favored birds

She just wants to seek and find.

But beneath a dead tree in a barren wasteland one night,

Beside an ocean of icy depths and under an evil, pure full moon,

Taborri, the raven girl, jumps off the edge, and dives into the sky, as her ravens.

Author's Note

I was thinking of making a story from this poem, any thoughts on that?

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think there is a really good short story in this...i would expand it to that, yes.

it is a very eerie poem...i think of Wednesday Adams all grown up...

she would wear something like that and befriend ravens.

i like your use of the raven here...i often see them as the protectors rather than the protected..

your imagery is breathtaking.

[Riley Bray]

Haha you're actually right about the Wendy Adams reference! I hadn't noticed it until you mentioned it but it's so true! I'm glad you all are so supportive of this and the story I now intend to write for it! And I have to say, I agree that ravens are often portrayed as the protectors, but the strongest ones are often the ones that rely the most on something, or so I've noticed. Thank you very much for the review!

[Savior of Time]

That's a cool idea and HOW ARE YOU UNDER 18?! You're too good of a writer *pouts* I wish I were as good as you. Awesome job! I felt like I was there with her.. Gave me some chills.

[Riley Bray]

Haha wow that's really flattering. What I like to do is take lines I've heard of and twist them to make things like this. I also really like to sit there for hours on end and think of cool sounding contradictions to use. :P Using a picture to make a story is also really good, like the entire poem was based on those two pictures, (and I thought the name Taborri suited her). And you ARE as good as me! We're just as good as each other, it just all comes down to different styles. :P I think its really cool that this affected you, thanks for reading!

[Savior of Time]

HA! No I'm not.. But I do that sometimes, too.. No one gets my lines like they do yours, though.. I'm so jealous of your talent.
-Willa

[Riley Bray]

^---Hmmmm I do believe I smell modesty somewhere around here.... hmmm

[Savior of Time]

I honestly don't think I'm a good writer.

[Riley Bray]

And I honestly think you're being modest. :P You underestimate yourself my dear Willa~

[Savior of Time]

Well, I'm not. And no I don't..

[Riley Bray]

Hehe you sound like my friend Abs.

[Timeless Netizen]

You totally should! You said her name is Taborri? Cool.

[Riley Bray]

Yah cool.