This Time, You'd Better Go

I don't live to please him.

Its funny how every time you push me away

You turn around and beg me to stay.

And I stand there staring down at you wondering

Who the hell you think I am to let you step all over me.

You say you're sorry and that things will be better

But I'm no mans fool, so you'd best find shelter.

Batten down the hatches because I'm getting angry

I'm putting an end to this cycle because clearly you don't deserve me.

I'm sorry you're mental and its all a challenge

But its not my problem and I'll have my revenge.

For so long you thought you could play me like a fiddle

But I'll be damned if you don't decipher this riddle.

You're a relationship bipolar who's far to confused for my tastes

So you'd better pack your bags and begin to migrate.

And this time don't you dare come back

With that invisible tail between your shaking legs.

Because I'm not taking you back this time

And all I see you as is disgusting slime.

You're just another person to add to my growing list of mistakes

And don't give me that s**t about feeling your heart ache.

I gave you the chance to let me fill you and vice versa

But you ruined that and so now I'll be the alpha.

Get out of my sight

Mistake of mine.

I have a life to get back to

And this time I am over you.

Reviews

[DL Shackleford]

Raw and harsh. Reads like song lyrics without the bridge. You have an innate ability to relate to the emotional core of a situation and make it resonate with the reader. I have an issue with the use of "bipolar". Maybe confusing this with borderline? The behaviors are clear enough to describe. This is excellent otherwise.

[Riley Bray]

Like a song? Never noticed that before haha. I understand the dislike of the use bipolar, but was it offensive? I feel the syllables work better than the ones for borderline. I know I can describe it but what I meant y relationship bipolar is much like Katy Perry's song Hot and cold. Thanks for the review!

[Timeless Netizen]

Frankly, I like the use of the word bipolar, I totally understand what that means and it describes itself. I don't think its offensive because you weren't using it to offend. I liked the poem. :)

[DL Shackleford]

I don't find art offensive. When I read it I took it to mean just that, hot and cold, because you prefaced it with "relationship". It was as I read through your reviews that I thought perhaps I was mistaken since you did not clarify this to someone who clearly took it to mean the medical disorder.....So..If you mean the psychological disorder - you describe borderline not bipolar. If you mean opposites-perfect. Just don't want to unintentionally falsely maligning a group.

[Riley Bray]

Did I not respond to someone correctly? It was not my intention, i'm sorry haha. I'll make sure to keep an eye on that in the rest of my poems. Thank you!

[DL Shackleford]

Thanks for entertaining my question. I want honesty and give the same in a review. If I want sunshine blown up my *ss, I'll just keep relying on friends and family. I really do mean that you have a talent for capturing emotion within your work.

[Riley Bray]

Haha of course, and I agree with actually giving some criticism and things of the sort. Whats the point of posting works on this site just to have people lie and say its great or just say that? There's always something that can be better and rays of sunshine are not the way to convey that haha. I'll make sure to review some of your stuff when I'm done writing the poem I'm working on right now. :P

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Completely brimming over with emotion and establishes you as someone who is taking control of their life. Good read!

[Riley Bray]

Thanks!

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Riley,

Bluntly brutal but deservingly honest.
Good read.

Matthew
A.

[Riley Bray]

Thanks a ton! X3

[Rita L. Sev]

Ouch - attitude! You have said it all here, Riley! Great resolve shown in a poem with good rhythm.

[Riley Bray]

Thank you very much Rita.

[Lina Grey]

interesting, i just read So Not Over You and then i get to this... completely opposite. lol i like the attitude of this one, defiant, proud. relationship bipolars never work out well, it seems... great poem :)

[Riley Bray]

Haha thank you. :)

[Lina Grey]

welcome :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Whew! love...love...love, the more we hurts the more we perfected the way to love someone and be love, great write, I can relate to this work. Thanks for sharing.

[Riley Bray]

Thanks for the review!

[Graveyardfuck]

I love it! I can so relate too.

[Riley Bray]

Great! Thanks for the review. :)

[Graveyardfuck]

No problem.

[quinfinn]

well, all you had to say to convince me was "bipolar". no way in hell anyone can survive a healthy relationship with a bipolar individual...they are never wrong, they can do no wrong, they think everything they do is cute, and they are constantly vying for attention and must be at the center of everything....and that hot and cold s**t won't wash with me. i have a friend who is bipolar and sometimes i just want to beat the living dog s**t outta him. and i am not a violent man!!!! good riddance to bad rubbish...well written and highly provocative

[Riley Bray]

Yeah, I know where you're coming from. It can definitely be detrimental sometimes. Thanks for the review. :)

[Jeremia]

This hurts me a lot, because I look at this from the view of my ex. Now, I was a boy and didn't treat her how I should have, but I still cared for her a lot. I think it is still the best choice tho. If they aren't treating you right they shouldn't be allowed to enjoy you in their life until they fix themselves. I just regret that I waited so long to open my eyes. I cared for her a lot.

[Riley Bray]

I'm sorry if I unintentionally upset you, but I feel these words ring true for everyone at some point. :)

[Jeremia]

No worries. It was good. I need to forgive. Myself, her and the others involved. Your poem was good. :)

[Riley Bray]

Thank you. :)

[Shivam Murari]

Couldn't relate more. Loved it :) Thanks for sharing.

[Riley Bray]

Thank you. :)