Unfinished But Salvageable

My phone died and I was able to salvage scraps of some stuff I was working on and wanted to share.

Poem #1

Last night I had a dream about her,

I thought I was done, in fact I was sure.

Her voice was so real, such a soothing sound,

I woke up too soon, I lost the joy I had found.

For in that brief moment I was in ecstasy,

All because you were next to me.

It felt like a movie or a sad song,

It was over before I knew it, It didn't last long.

I'd give anything to go back to the dream,

The world I exist in is worse than the dream.

You are around me but it isn't the same,

I look in your eyes, can you sense my pain?

I was supposed to be done caring about you,

My dream was a lie, our actions aren't true.

Poem #2

Words can't describe,

The way I truly feel inside.

But this is a poem after all, so I might as well try.

Before I would agonize over the question of why?

Now despite having feelings for you in the past,

I admit I was confused, upset, and I'll save jealousy for last.

Time heals all wounds, was a notion I clutched to,

Held on so tight to the idea of you.

A funny thing happened when I saw you differently,

we became closer, as friends, I didn't believe.

At the start I won't lie I was a bit conflicted,

In my heart I was still basically addicted.

Author's Note

Review if you like this was more a way for me to get the scraps of forgotten works down so I didn't lose them. I would as always still love thoughts on what I do have so feel free to let me know! Thanks.

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

There is a lot of emotion in here well expressed. I would like to suggest that you try something without feeling you have to rhyme and you don't always stick to it anyway - i get the impression that finding the rhyme has become a bit of a straightjacket.
Would you like to have a look at my poem - 'Dad the clock's stopped'
Thanks,
Alan

[Joshua McNay]

I have tried a few times to not have it rhyme, every time I do though it just doesn't feel right. I know it's silly, and want to work on it, but it always lingers. Thanks for the review, I will give yours a read of course.

[alanwgraham]

Don't pay too much attention to me - I don't always get it right myself!
alan

[Joshua McNay]

no one is perfect for sure but I shouldn't be held hostage by rhymes. Just have to get it in my head it's ok not to rhyme. That will be tough though.