Prison Blues

You ask do I have any last words. I sure do sirs. I ask for just a moment of your time good sirs. You have me in this chair because of the many murders I have committed. You call me a serial killer. I have been asked by many why I killed the way I did. Why did I use knifes and blunt objects instead of guns. Guns are detestably easy. I despise them as tools of the weak. Guns are meant for good so I leave them to that. Guns do not make me murder, nor do they have any part in my murders. I do not want people to blame an inanimate object for my wonderful adventures. I proved the idiots wrong by using many different tools for my adventures. Can you blame all those objects? Or can we now agree that I am a man that does not adhere to rules. I am unable to fathom why you hold me in a chair about to kill me rather quickly as if this pays my debt to society. If there is a God will sending me to him sooner be fulfilling a debt? If there is no God is sending me out of the world and into the ground really a punishment? I don’t get this form of payment. Why do you let me off easy? Wouldn’t torturing me pay more debt? If your stomachs are too weak for that form of payment wouldn’t holding me in a cell for my whole life with the bare essentials and no abilities to have my adventures be a better punishment? You have no answer for this. This is why I had my adventures. Idiots. Let your brief adventure begin.

Reviews

[emilytaylorinkie]

Straight away you have a strong voice. Great! Try not to over use 'sirs'. It's repetitive. Guns are meant for good? Oh that's bullshit, sorry.Guns were created to kill. I do like how you wanted him to be 'in control' of the murders by using certain objects. The ending could be stronger. The last line, while i can see the intent, seems out of place. Your talking about his adventure etc. So why the sudden jump to 'let your brief adventure begin' what adventure? Hasn't it already begun? Are they going to start murdering? Of course, this is my personal opinion. Take what you want. But good work. Very interesting concept.

[Jayden Ireton]

Thank you for reading. Ha I like your brutal honesty. I do believe guns are killing machines but does that mean they are not good? They were meant for protection. People have warped their use for robbery etc. They can be good or they can be bad. The last line about adventure is referring to them killing him. They become murderers like him. Murder to him is adventure. It is meant to make us look at the usefulness of the death penalty.

[emilytaylorinkie]

I guess in a sense that is true. They are a form of protection and whether they're good or evil is left to the user. That doesn't stop the fact that they were created to inflict pain though. Ooooh, I get it now. I actually really like that idea. For that's right, killing him is murder. Maybe develop that idea with asentence or two. It's quite brilliant!

[Marie]

Excellent. Execution is not about justice but revenge. And is it the best revenge possible? A person can only be killed once, no matter how many times he kills.

It's "knives" not "knifes".

[Jayden Ireton]

Thank you. You got the point exactly. Thanks for catching the mistake.

[Imara]

Wow. I'm so glad I found this, so brave. So I applaud you for putting it out here. Ok, I love that you are talking to us, daring us to rethink our ideas about guns. Making the wielder of the gun responsible not the gun itself. We really get a look into the Unknown Killers mind, that he enjoys this and doesn't believe that there is a God who is really going to punish him. Contradicting our system of death for punishment, essentially calling us the serial killers going on the same just abbreviated "adventures" as this villain. Wonderful work.

[Jayden Ireton]

Thank you so much. I am glad that the work really spoke to you. You got exactly what I was writing for.

[Imara]

You're welcome :)

[Traci]

I like the dark nature of this story and how you transport the reader into the mind of the killer. The metaphor between guns and good apposed to tools was very well written. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Great job, Justin.

[Jayden Ireton]

Thank you very much for the kind review.

[Blue Belle]

I like the overall message that objects don't kill, people kill. I think in some places the wording could be re-arranged, but other than that, it's good.

[Jayden Ireton]

Thank you. Is there a specific example you can point out?

[Blue Belle]

The first sentence maybe could be, 'You ask me if I have any last words'. And some of the things you say should be in quotes and the things you think should be italicized. Hope that helps a bit.

[Jayden Ireton]

Yes that helps greatly. Thank you.

[Julia Mancini]

That was really dark, but really good. The reader is really transported into the mind the serial killer.

[Jayden Ireton]

Thank you for the read and kind words.