The Cut

As it slices through I feel the burn of intense pleasure

The two sides parting like the water for Moses

Truly a red sea

The exhilaration of one tiny fluid movement

How easily we find pleasure In pain

Pressing the razor to the skin

Time to go again

Reviews

[Blue Belle]

Awesome poem.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Great imagery in this one! I love the idea of parting the "red sea" and "Moses", you kept the image throughout, which made the piece as a whole coheisive and fluid.

"How easily we find pleasure in pain."--isn't this the truth? Sometimes we become so numb as humans that even pain is welcome because at least we are feeling SOMETHING. I won't go into the mechanics review again, you get what my thoughts are on that I'm sure. For the content, this is very strong.

[Jayden Ireton]

Yes we are creatures that push for any feeling even if it's not good. Thank you for saying it's very strong. You have helped me greatly.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

:) My pleasure