I SEE YOU (Just If)

Ever didn't have something or someone you felt belonged to you?

 

If I breathed in the light of your emergence

If I kneeled in complete mercy of your feel

If I told you how I high I feel

If I told you how deeply your desired the reason I deep breathe at night and grip my pillow tighter.

I’ am where you belong you and him are wrong, don’t I feel righter.

Would you deny my sacrifice to just be apart of your life.

To just touch her

Clutch her

Lust to love her

Or be the serene parts of her dreams.

Its weird because I never chose to find love, though it notices me

He humps you like he’s thirteen

I’d grind you just for a taste of your body’s stream.

You see, he’ll never understand the richness of your beauty.

Till he has no money

He will never enjoy the fruits of your intellect

Till he goes hungry.

Like he’s, looking for gold when he has diamonds

Already rich and still doing crime

So I must ask one more time.

If I gave all I had to be your now and him your then

If you only knew how I shutter just by glancing when you grin.

If only I could be the beautiful fate you never chose

If only you know how high I place your soul

Could I have you?

Make me your statue

 

I fit into your mold

 

I’ll let your lips be the pages

My hands make the words

With our love the greatest story told.

Just If………

Just If………

You gave me your name.

Reviews

[Candid Writer]

Wowwwwww weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! This is hot. I always have a soft spot of "What Ifs," but this my friend did not need my soft heart for its passion to sink in and melt away gently. It would warm even the hardest of hearts. I cannot pick a favorite line, because the are all equally great and powerful. After reading this poem, it felt like a great and mighty wind swept through my heart, yet it did not tear it apart... it just allowed it to melt away effortlessly.

C'est si bon mon ami. C'est brilliante!

[Faceless Love]

Wow that was hot. The ending was a unexpected. Loved it. Beautiful.

[Treasure]

Gotdangit! My My My! I loved it. Oh the thoughts we have just at a glance. I love poetry!:-) And I could just feel you at a spoken word open mic doing your thing and the shock and awe theory that would have them gasping at the end. There it is, you're done and there goes the fingers popping.
Peace

[I Am THE LADY POET]

This is a beautiful piece. There is nothing more attractive then a man who can get in touch with his sensitive side. A Great write.

[Taja B.]

Oh, the pains of unrequited love. I really hope this girl tells you her name and I hope she reads this poem because, honestly, it's very evocative and good in general.

I especially loved these lines:

He humps you like he's thirteen
I'd grind you just for a taste of your body's stream.
You see, he'll never understand the richness of your beauty.
Till he has no money
He will never enjoy the fruits of your intellect
Till he goes hungry.

These previous lines are not only well written, it also displays a message very common: it shows that not only that you are the right guy for this girl, it also shows that people never appreciate of what they have until it's gone. So it's a good thing that you see the abundance of her beautiful traits, and do not take her for granted.

Anyways, I really enjoyed this poem. It's well written, flows quite well, and you convey your emotions very effectively.

Thanks for sharing.

[Nik'aule]

I see now that you're a spoken word artist... your words rhyme like you're speaking them aloud to a crowd. Great work, once again.

[Choosing Life]

Wow...
"Or be the serene parts of her dreams."
That line alone did it for me, because a dream is already like the height of one's imagination usually,
It is usually all you could hope for and you want to be the serene part of that... Wow.

I also love you want her name.. Now I am not sure if you meant it how I read it but if you did... That means you want to give her yours... Damn... nothing more sacred or lovely than that..

You want more than her body. You want all that she is and then you want to lead her into what she will become when she finds oneness with you...

Bravo

[K. McNeil]

"You see, he'll never understand the richness of your beauty.
Till he has no money
He will never enjoy the fruits of your intellect
Till he goes hungry.
Like he's looking for gold when he has diamonds
Already rich and still doing crime"

WOOO!!! i love it and the way each line is as crafty and beautiful as the one before it and the next

[DeanCentricGal]

Wonderful, another great one. :)

[Bearcub The First]

Wonderful, that is angelic. That is writen with such elegance and beauty. I feel the same way about a girl

[Julia]

I really like the parts when you say that he basically wont see her for what she's worth until he has nothing else. You describe things really well.