PRIMAL SCREAM REALITY

a very rough day

PRIMAL SCREAM REALITY

when the walls are mush
and the floors whisper pain
to the touch of my feet
as
exit signs glow
in all the rooms behind my eyes
like crystal shards shattering
and
the expanding reality sucks my blood
as swamp leeches fasten to the eyes of dead soldiers...
then
the primal scream of my soul writhing
is therapy only because the sound is real...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words my dear Poet friend. The words create dangerous places and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Maja]

That was a terrifying read. And I love the lines:

"as
exit signs glow
in all the rooms behind my eyes"

because we're all looking for an escape, in one way or another, from this reality that we're all stuck in.

[dan]

jeannemarie, I hope you know by now that I am a big fan of yours. You write things that are fun and amusing, or of historical import...and then you write a piece like this. The depth, the vast expanse of feeling you imbue in your writes is astounding. I could try to dissect the piece and tell you how good it is THAT way, but it's better as a whole entity and, well...indescribable. As a writer I pride myself on my ability to frame my feelings in descriptive and intelligent wording. And for this, I have nothing...except this is freakin' GREAT! My most enthusiastic compliments! take care...dan

[mattavelli]

I hope you feel better. Here's a funny story. I have around thirty read requests from you. My god, slow down!!! :)

[jeannemarie coulter]

will slow down on the requests and i apologize for them...i enjoy your comments and do thank you for them...i am slowly making it through the list of requests from others too...every time i get the list down under 100 i am interrupted and when i return it is over 100 again...i am chuckling with you for a bit crazy we must be

[sereenaoutloud]

pain needing to be released... this is powerful write...

and the floors whisper pain
to the touch of my feet

You capture this perfectly you can feel it!! Brilliant

[jeannemarie coulter]

thank you so much and blessings to you as well...

[Emily]

'like crystal shards shattering'
I am not sure why, but this line seemed to make the poem better!
Keep it up!

[wordman]

sounds like your soul is crying out for unjust and oppressed as well as your pain

[jeannemarie coulter]

i saw a woman today both eyes blackened one arm in a sling with purple black marks on every part of her flesh visible to me...she would not meet my eyes when i offered a smile, just a simple smile free of charge...i wondered what "hell " she had just lived through that would make her fearful of a strangers smile in the park in the morning...and thus i wrote what i felt...thank you for understanding

[wordman]

i have no idea why men feel the need to beat up their wives,

[Perkele.7885]

I have a high pain threshold for pain and your words were making my temples begin to pulse! Owe!

[jeannemarie coulter]

i hope your pain has passed...i was trying to describe deep horrible loss and pain...i guess you understood better than i wished...

[Perkele.7885]

indeed, some of my buttons are very sensitive indeed they are! What a poor thing I am!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, the release of pain...wow...this is so good...and i couldn't help thinking of a movie i saw when i was a kid...own it now on DVD..."Mr. Sardonicus"---there are echoes of that film in this....for various reasons.

[jeannemarie coulter]

will check out the movie...thanks for the read and i am glad it touched you deeply...

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Yes, I can so relate to the release of pain.
Excellent poetry.