WORDS FOREVER words, all kinds of words explode from this weary broken mind, flood out across the environment, rushing like burning lava... creeks into streams, becoming molten rivers destroying whatever they touch until they are spewed into the sea rising in rainbow images of steam sparkling into forever...
That is one very awesome picture, I must say! It goes very well with this poem, and makes it more atmospheric. As far as the poem goes, its filled with fine imagery, and I was able to easily visualize every line of it. Once it got to the line "rushing like burning lava...", that's when I think it really started to show off its dance moves, and boy were they spectacular(I'm not saying that the rest of the poem wasn't, I just thought those lines were spectacularly spectacular, rather than just spectacular). Your words, in this piece are quite magical. :)
This is a statement revealing the awesome power that words can release into the world and all who hear/read them. Sometimes words can get away from the writer and echo down darkened corridors that were better left unexplored; sometimes those same corridors NEED to be confronted, damn the critics of such nebulous words. A very powerful piece, thank you. take care...dan
Jeannemarie,
I related this poem to the darker side of writing. Somehow our darkest, most painful words spew forth onto the page. Sometimes we have some control, but at others, it is pure emotion. Somewhere, in the process they are morphed into a cohesive whole that is synergistically more beautiful than the words or emotion alone. I have read many dark pieces that radiate beauty despite the obvious darkness. The are the ones that are almost haunting.
The way you wrote the poem gave me the feeling that words are unstoppable, like we are made of fragile things and all those words are not just leaking, but exploding from us. The image I got from this was an argument between two people; the weary broken mind and the following lines had the effect of someone tired and, well, we lose our filter when we're exhausted. But after that when they have cooled down the words become gentler and sweeter, and like the words before it, they remain in the space between the two people forever.
That is one very awesome picture, I must say! It goes very well with this poem, and makes it more atmospheric. As far as the poem goes, its filled with fine imagery, and I was able to easily visualize every line of it. Once it got to the line "rushing like burning lava...", that's when I think it really started to show off its dance moves, and boy were they spectacular(I'm not saying that the rest of the poem wasn't, I just thought those lines were spectacularly spectacular, rather than just spectacular). Your words, in this piece are quite magical. :)
I am in love with this poem and this image you have found to go with it. This is awesome imagery and you have struck gold with me. Just a beautifully constructed piece of work. Be proud of it!