IN RAT TIME

the now of is of a dark sort...

IN RAT TIME

the time of sadness
echoes in fires of sound
through honeycomb hollows
in all the shuttered mind rooms
with a vegetation of fantasy
dripping like aged spanish moss
where shadow corpses hollow time
crying...

 every skull face
rattles to
echo emptiness
and
the night of being
is too long
and
the sounds of loving
are too cold...
the laughter
has abandoned it all...

for,
the rat lives in all the walls,
rooms in all the minds,
feeds on all the souls,
is
glutted by all the death,
war,
hate...

forming icicles
in the halls of nothing
where hollow shadows
walk
whispers that cannot
talk
listen...you will hear...

the rat stalks...
the now of is has lost it’s charm
and
unexists as dark as deep
and
what there is was never seen
and
what was had has never been...

for all of it was always souled,
the damned rat owns it/us all,
holds all primary liens,
licks the bones
 clean as christ
tossing them in the deepest dark
where
skeletons rattle like dice
crying...




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Author's Note

took some advice, did a bit of an edit...you were correct, my friend...

Reviews

[Confuser]

jeannemarie: I love the concept, the metaphor, we are at the mercy of so many things; but those whispers we will never know, for we don't have any control. I believe every word of Dan's review; this is a powerful writing. It is dark, but it's a trap, a place we all can survive, scary and undefined, unique to all, when looked at metaphorically. We are slaves to demons if we choose; love the way you built the poem. I was captivated, and very impressed. In Rat Time; yep, they're not going anywhere anytime. So glad Dan sent a RR. Brilliant work. I love it!!! Thank you so much. Dale

[wordman]

well lady,you certainly have the gift of story telling,you have a vivid imagination
loved the image

[Cherry Pepperweb]

I love dark tales. You truly have a gift for story telling JC.
I've only read two of yours but I can tell I'll be in for a treat whenever I visit. I'm a fan.

[jeannemarie coulter]

not sure i am worthy but thank you...

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Lol. :)
You are.

[Braden Freeman]

I enjoyed this. It kind of reminds me of the time there were mice in my dad's house. They kind of freaked me out though.