Black Hummingbirds Flew

                      Black Humming Birds flew

 

 

 In my mind I can see

 black hummingbirds fly.

 In the corners they swoop, while glass figures cry.

 They sail on updrafts,

 where the past laughs and flaunts.

 Black hummingbirds watch, in the darkness they taunt.

 They feed not on nectar's or sweetness's grown,

 they feed on the minds of the people well known.

 Wings hum in the darkness, black shadows on black,

  as they jet in and out of the minds

 files once stacked.

 Glowing eyes

 in each corner, their wings sow

 a low groan;

 in the depths of the minds of the people well known.

 Hands clenched to their heads.

 These- where black hummingbirds fly.

 They fall to their knees and these glass figures try;

 to get up and focus on things they once knew.

 It's time.

 The darkness.

 Then- black hummingbirds

 flew.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Right off I'm jolted into a whole new way of thinking about my favorite gracefully humming feathered friends! Your words are very original & flow with an ominous threat, combining unexpected imagery successfully. I'm not that good at interpreting nuanced poetry, so I took a peek at Lydia's review & suddenly I could see those dark thoughts swarming as she suggested. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[John Ciarmello]

I thank you so much for the review barlegirl! I apologize for draining the color from such a beautiful bird,but it had to be done! lol Best Wishes!

[Lydia Shutter]

The rhythm of your words and the rhyme scheme is intoxicating. "Black hummingbirds"...dark thoughts....they infiltrate our everyday lives in so many different ways. Allowing them to fly away is the way to find peace. Well written. Lydi**

[John Ciarmello]

Thank You for the great review, Lydia. I entered it in the dark poetry contest. LOL

[D.H.Simmons]

They sal on up drafts where the past laughs and flaunts

[John Ciarmello]

Thank you for the review, Cherrie. I try not to go dark to often.

[John Ciarmello]

I thank You much for that review, Sami. It was at a time when I needed to nourish my dark side. To pick the most beautiful and make it dark turns on the minds light. Its simply something I live by when I feel dark. lol

[Cherrie Palmer]

Awesome, love the flow the rhythm and images. You have rebirthed the mad Starlings into its own vivid tale of darkness.

[John Ciarmello]

sorry Cherrie It seems I put my response to your review in my review box lol. I've figured it out now! lol

[Cherrie Palmer]

It 'll work lol

[Sami Khalil]

A majestic poem on a majestic small bird. Intricate details and full of life. Nothing short of engraving the minds with wonder.

[John Ciarmello]

Sorry Sami new here. It seems I've put my response to your review in my review box. I've got it down now lol.

[Sami Khalil]

No problem. It is all ok. You are welcome.