Confusion

This is a Shakespearean sonnet I wrote for English class back when I was a junior in high school.

Inside of your mind is nothing to see.

With clouds of misery and pouring rain,

a mist of silence divides you from me;

the only victor is the endless pain.

Another day brings another goodbye;

a steady build of agony alarms.

The core of truth is now all left a lie.

Honesty has vanished from broken arms.

With one stream of words we can soon be glad

and raise a smile to the sky above.

This desire we hate that makes us sad

brings hope and a reason to love

a popular act: foolish and callow,

is hiding in water that is too shallow?

Author's Note

I have no fuckin idea what I was trying to say in this poem. Maybe I was just trying to hit the syllable and pattern structure... what kind of message did you get out of it? I'd love to hear thoughts.

Reviews

[SinisterBeast72]

I am no poetry critic , so I wont try to be one . I assume ( for the most part ) this poem said what you needed it to say . I chose this poem to read because ..lets be honest here " I Dwell in Darkness " so the title was apt for the type of Literature I like to read ....so yeah " Confusion" was good , I liked it. Oh , and on a final note my poem you reviewed of mine was a " Final Draft " & it was supposed to be " choppy " . You can find my latest Literature at : http://thefearmachine.blogspot.com . It`s called " Awake " . You`ll find it to be ...quite different from " Black Leeches -OBEY " Peace ! ;-)