destined dreamer

inspirational thoughts on believing in your dreams

Your dreams will not die,

they have a mind of their own they are alive

and when you give life to that dream when you allow it to flourish it begins to beam

all you ever wanted can exist and come true

as long as you sprinkle a little faith and let it brew

and some hope to make it bubble

then the ultimate ingredient determination

determination along with focus

cause when you eyes on the prize there is a deep penetrating concentration that lies,

lies beyond the road, that forks over there

cause when you trust your dreams you and them will have no fear

no hesitation about the road less taken

for at that moment you will feel destined

destined to be all that you ever wanted to be

and having prepared for that moment success will be a dance you know all to well

Reviews

[Beau Maysey]

I like this poem a lot, and you seem to be a poet on your way to great works.
perhaps add in a little more figurative language, and be careful with rhyme, but I like the repetition of certain words from one line to another, the anaphora, the little nod to Robert Frost (I assume), and the spirit behind it. Keep writing, and good job! :D

[softlyspoken]

Thank you I appreciate you review and I'm glad you understood my reference to Robert Frost , your the first one to point that out. Thanks Again

[Sami Khalil]

You are destined to be a dreamer and a poet...:)........

[paleshadeofwhite]

good piece I enjoyed it thx for sharing :D

[softlyspoken]

THANK YOU PLEASE READ MY LATEST ADDITION

[justjenn_2u]

This has potential. The sentences and phrases could be lined up to make a beautiful piece.

[softlyspoken]

thanks im working on the format

[Sarah Coll]

This is a really lovely poem with some really nice touches! I agree that beginning the next line with the word that finished the last was an especially nice touch as it gave the poem a flow which it wouldn't have had otherwise. There are some points where you should watch your form a little (I wouldn't take this to heart as I can be quite fussy) but it's nothing significant and it most certainly does not take away from the fact that this is a very nicely written piece!

Well done, keep going!

[softlyspoken]

Thanks I really appreciate it but please do expand on what you meant by whatching my form. Im a new writer and i love constructive critsm i just would like to get clariy on that please. Thanks again

[Sarah Coll]

No bother, I've sent you a mail explaining it. Look forward to hearing from you!

[Skalved]

Interesting read. The message is clear, and I agree with the sentiments expressed. I'm also a believer. Thanks for sharing.

[softlyspoken]

Thank You i appreciate it

[Skalved]

I hope you post some more work, you write with conviction

[softlyspoken]

Thank you i will

[softlyspoken]

PLEASE READ MY NEWEST POEM

[BlackHeart]

I liked how you used the word you ended one sentence with to start the next one. I find this writing piece very interesting. I hope that you get more and more reviews because this is truly an amazing piece.

[softlyspoken]

aww thanks u so much i appreciate it

[RazzySkittles]

I really like the words you used, such as "you sprinkle a little faith, and let it brew" I felt you use some clever words with out making the whole thing rhyme (Which in truth it's hard some times to make good poetry that doesn't rhyme or have rhythm.) I like your poem I think it's Terrific! :)

[softlyspoken]

thank you so much