When everything is gone

How do you speak when your very breath only aggravates the ache in your chest?

How do you speak when the lump in your throat is suffocating you?

How do you speak when the slightest word brings you to tears?

How do you speak when you can’t trust your own mouth, your own mind?

What do you say when everyone is gone?

What do you say when everything has turned against you-your friends, your family, your own mind?

What do you say when you are watching your whole world crumble to pieces, your throne destroyed? Like your childhood. Like your innocence.

What do you say when there is no more hope?

No, I’m not happy. I’m not sure I ever was.

No, I’m not okay. I’m not sure I ever will be.

Reviews

[Zoë]

Wow... that's just, that's deep. I can't even describe how I'm feeling right now, that's just really emotional.

[Hyacinth]

I am speechless. Literally. The emotion that you convey in your writing, it's astonishing. And the flow of the words is just so natural. It seems so real...wow.

[amberelisabethbagley]

The emotion in this is very touching. IT will speak to so many people as it did to me. It is good to see poetry that is about the gritty pain of human life and not just the fantasy pain.

[Alexandra Hounschell]

This is very wonderful. Some minor things can be done to it, but it's emotion makes it remarkable.

[Maura Ansley]

Could you tell me what Minor things can be done? I want to improve it in any way I can. Also, thank you!

[Alexandra Hounschell]

Last line of the first stanza: instead of a coma, use a semicolon for the correct flow of the line.
Again this in the third line of the second stanza
That's all that caught my eye really... It was well written

[KlineXcreed]

This is a very interesting piece. I ca sense the raw emotion. Keep up the writing!!