Ticking By

Read the poem.

 it flies likes a bird.
it only goes forward.
it can be wasted or saved,
in it futures are paved.
 it can go slow,
it go can fast.
it can drag by,
it can blast past.
 its easy to say,
easy to see.
a job with no pay,
comes completely free.
old yet new,
new but old.
it cannot say boo,
 it cannot catch a cold.
 so comes to end,
this rhythm with rhyme.
look out, world,
my name is time.

Author's Note

Hoping a certain person will edit this......? ( looks pointedly at madiloveszombies)

Reviews

[Chris Taylor]

So clever this poem is. I knew by the second line this poem was about time. That speaks of your ability as a writer and me being long in the tooth. lol. I loved the line: "... futures are paved". That just really jumped out at me. A good poem.

God Bless.

[Sira YR]

I like the rhythm to it. It makes it a joy to read. My favorite is the two end verses "Look out world, my name is time!" I personally think that it is fine the way it is. (Maybe you could turn it into a song lol :) ). Anyway good job and nice structure.