Please Don't Say Goodbye

Sometimes pride just gets into the way ...

There just wasn’t enough time

I thought we had forever

But that was just a lie

 

You look at me now with such pain in your eyes

Refusing to give words to how you feel

 

Come to me

 

I don’t want us to end so unexpectedly

I need us to get pass this obstacle

 

Tell me you love me

Please don’t say goodbye

 

It’ll just hurt more

If we both turn away

 

If it aches, just scream

Don’t hold it in

Stop pretending to heal so rapidly

 

There just wasn’t enough time

I thought we had forever

But that was just a lie

 

You stand here now with regret in your eyes

Declining the need to shed a tear

 

Hold on to me

 

I wish I could take away all your pain

Erase that moment from inside your brain

 

Tell me you adore me

Please don’t say goodbye

 

It’ll just hurt more

If we both go our separate ways

 

If it stings, just scream

Don’t pretend you can’t feel

This doesn’t have to be the end of us

Reviews

[Xeru]

Damn you are beautiful. Your style just has my attention. Another Queen's point of view and a very accurate vision of a man who cant or doesnt know how to heal himself. You spew love like oceans spew water in this joint. Its all about fighting the good fight and not giving up. And this joint tells the story of insecurity not being confident in returned love. You are a very real example of how amazing our people/women really are. This is pure love.

[barleygirl]

This is honest, straightforward & very recognizable, as far as how it can sometimes feel. Even tho your narrator seems to be throwing out strong arguments, for some reason, I don't feel this poem as being as desperate as your title might suggest. In fact, this message feels a little casual, even tho the words express a fair amount of wishing & longing & regret. In short, ambivalence might be the biggest takeaway & I love ambivalence. Most people are really ambivalent, even when they talk a big show (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Thea Fuentebella]

seems like a song lyric. wonderful:>

[M.Babu]

"If it aches, just scream
Don’t hold it in
Stop pretending to heal so rapidly"

This was just such a powerful stanza i had no choice but to quote it! I felt like it was meant for me alone (which indicates that you really connected with your audience- which takes talent). The tone of the persona is so hurt and pleading, one cannot help but sympathize with her situation. True emotion was conveyed with the words and for that i applaud you for this poem!

Very good! Keep Writing more!!!

[Tasha]

I liked this a lot. I also enjoyed your style by combining two colors, you truly did an amazing job and I loved it.

~ Ta'Shandra :)