Dust

The duality of human nature

 

Here in the darkness

I have no name

One mans evil is another mans good

One mans devil is another mans god

Depends on your belief

Or your lack of faith

Depends on your faith

Or your lack of belief

Is the Lord my shepherd?

Is my shepherd a Lord?

Is it better a soul without a heart?

Or a heart without a soul?

Perhaps it doesn’t matter

In the end we are all dust

Food for next years harvest

All of us are dust in the end.

Reviews

[Michael X]

I like this alot, there is much to consuider but
even in such a short poem, one can feel the imbalance and see overwording
as seen in the first line, needs fine tuning, grammer issues,
here in the darkness.....vs...in darkness"...shorter and punctuated thoughts
also the line breaks have no real structure, whether free form or other,
but its a good poem and a pleasure to read, i really like the cliche insight,
many great aspects to a poem that is great but could be alot better.

[Ariadne President]

This is a great poem that you have done, Jasper. Heh, but I did find some errors in it, like this.
One mans evil is another mans good

One mans devil is another mans god
Mans should be changed into man's. Just helping you. All in all I want for you to keep writing! :)

[Tessa]

"One mans evil is another mans good
One mans devil is another mans god
Depends on your belief
Or your lack of faith"

I think it would work better if you changed the "your"s to "his". Since you're talking about any man, it becomes a little awkward when you suddenly switch the subject.

I like it. Where you listening to Kansas when you wrote it? ;-)