Lord, Bring The Rain

Had to do one for God, Peace and Love.

Lord, Please bring the ran

The sun makes it hard to run

Lord, Bring the Rain

The bright light burns my eyes

Lord, Bring the Rain

There is a peace when the rain hits me

Lord, Bring the Rain

Its like it washes away the pain from me

Lord, Bring the Rain

Bring it to make me feel that I can breath

Lord, Bring the Rain

Bring the Rian so I can forget the pain

Lord, Bring the Rain.

 

Reviews

[shadadakiya]

oh i just love the rain it brings such peace within me,even the storms they just make me stronger when i go through them and im still standing after the storms,if not for them we would not know what a beautiful clear day would bring,great write (: bring on the rain so i can forget the pain) let it rain let it rain let it rain

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very nice poem, comforting read on a rainy night. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

This is a beautiful poem. Most people love to get out and escape in the rain, myself included. To those who do find it as an escape, this really hits home with them. Thank you for writing.

"Lord, Please bring the ran" --- rain.

"Its like it washes away" --- It's. And you might want to try something like "It washes away" without It's or like.

"that I can breath" --- breathe.

"Bring the Rian so I i can forget the pain" --- "Bring the rain" and you have to many "I"s in there. I also really love this sentence. It pretty much sums up the whole poem and brings the reader to a conclusion that you need the rain to survive and help you to heal.

[Lucinda Bogart]

I like this...it speaks of hope and relief and peace...a faith that things can and will get better. Nice !

[The Outlaws' Song]

Very nice!! I love the rain too...i love walking in the rain...running in the rain...Rain is great.
As for your poem..it's peaceful and it has a very tender flow. Nicely done:)