the sun draws shadows

i took a walk down Clark

towards Hastings earlier...

 

the sun cast a faint

energetic hue across

the city,

like a meloncholic sepia sunset...

 

a cloud of dust shivered

in the light as i looked

out past the skytrain

towards the mountains,

a shock of lush green

against the acid concrete

of dull blues and greys...

 

i turned up Venebles,

the throng of activity

on Commercial Drive

vibrates, buzzes, and hums...

the hopping mad bazaar

of Vancouver...

a spiced aroma of the food,

flesh, and minds of the world

fills the air...

conversational exuberant exclamations,

declarations, vows, deals, sweat,

blood, piss, s**t, vomit...

exchanges of night and day,

the beet-red curtains

pulled wide for inspection

by any who so dare...

 

i'd wade into that beautiful chaos

again

someday,

but my back is still a little bent...

 

i cross at Venebles and Commercial

and head to Victoria

turning right towards Broadway

breathing the ease of

falling cherry blossoms,

their intoxicating scent

a warm pink

opiate dream.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What an expanse of words.. a lush adventure for someone who didn't have a clue about the places, streets, you mention.. but do, just a little, now. There's such a down to earth feel to your post.. no holding back espeically, '.. the hopping mad bazaar ~ of Vancouver... ~ a spiced aroma of the food,~ flesh, and minds of the world ~ fills the air..... ' and more., much more.

For some reason, I feel you love this place, every inch of it.. and return as if lost where you are. Fine, fine writing.

[JC]

dam this is an oldie, thank you not just for the great review but bringing me back here into my past, you are right that I am always drawn back to those streets, though they have changed so much now...and I am currently in a rural east and loving the quiet :)

[emmajoy]

Am gradually working from some of the earlies to the nows of my Friends posts.. curisosity killing the cat and all that!

[JC]

ha, yea I like to do that too, will be around to delve into yours more soon as well, I like your style.

[Ees]

Do you know what I liked, the in the moment feel, and the way you gave the street names. there are so many people who would not recognize the streets, but it makes it so much more real to include them! It is hard to capture in city streets the light and the energy and turn it into something as poetic as it feels in the moment, but you have done that and I like it.
Lovely work. Very well done!

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

You love to use 'sepia' in your writes,don't you :)..you said melancholic sepia sunset..and i sighed at the beauty of those words...just as when you said pink opiate dreams.

[Hedra Helix]

man! thats glorious its like im there with you, like at the interstection I want to take you hand and walk with you onto the other street- to see the colors to smell the smells to run my hand up your back and straighten it. love this!


the sun cast a faint
energetic hue across
the city,
(like/imho,re) (in) a meloncholic sepia sunset...

[Sarah]

I love this, what an experience! Your description was spectacular & played on the senses in order to draw the reader in. What I love most is that the action in this poem is so simple, merely walking down a road, and yet there's so much to take notice of, that very few people do. I like this a lot, great job!