What Goes Through My Mind When I Look At You

Dark bangs frame her

Buddha soul

An enviable smile

Holds me in a trance,

She is my hypnotic snake charmer

And I am the viper 

wanting nothing more

than to sink my fangs

into her milky flesh

I see the draw to darkness

That willingly stains her soul

I'll bring you down into the depths

let that poison sink into your carotid

and we'll lay at the bottom

staring at the pointless stars

like junkies drugged up on exotic erotic bliss...

Reviews

[Carol Cashes]

"...She is my hypnotic snake charmer
And I am the viper
She is my hypnotic snake charmer And I am the viper"

This, the first clue to the nature of the narrator.

I really like this, well done.

[JC]

thanks Carol, much appreciated....

[Enchanted-Raven]

Nice!...enjoyed from beginning to end, well penned! :) x

[APOORVA]

Dark bangs frame her
Buddha soul
An enviable smile
Holds me in a trance,
OH I FELL IN LOVE WITH THIS START...
JUST BEAUTIFUL.

I'll bring you down into the depths
let that poison sink into your carotid
LOVED IT AGAIN...

[JC]

thank you...I look forward to knowing you and learning about you...

[...]

this is quiet beautiful song. Like come in from the heart. Very clear and bright picture.

[emmajoy]

' An enviable smile ~ Holds me in a trance, ~ She is my hypnotic snake charmer ~ And I am .. .. '

An extremity of words, an unrolling of phrases, neither safe not sorry, neither gentle nor charitable and yet, incredibly passionate. Love has its ways with those under the influence of what' or who is at hand.

[Enigma Monster]

Lovely imagery, very nice work indeed.
I dig it.

[Nisreen]

She sounds like the perfect woman
The drug in your veins

Really well done

[Laaiqah Amaani Ruzaick]

It definitely portrays immense affection & significance to the subject of your poetry. It is well-written, balanced & a sensitive piece of writing. Good work JC!

[JC]

Thank you for reading Laaiqah, I appreciate it and look forward to more of your work.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is sexy, and smart, and well written. A truly enjoyable read.

[JC]

Why thank ya :) I appreciate that.

[Gray]

I like the way you wrote this, especially the end.