God of Gods

God of Gods forsaken

God of Gods way have you forsaken me to this hell on earth.

 

 My onreqwidit true love in his arms, in not mine.

 

I cry my self to sleep win I think of her in his arms and not mine.

 

My mind quakes win I think of them.

 

I die a little every day.

Reviews

[Spoken]

definately written to project raw emotion and does so very well. Love lost is not easy but I try to look at those you lose in love as just life lessons/experience to prepare you for "The One" who has your love forever... great piece!

My onreqwidit true love in his arms in not mine. (true love in his arms not in mine?..... or true love in his arms, in not mine?).

and dye (die)

[Albert Freeman]

This is good. The image it brings forth is someone outwitted and cast down from the heavens. Betrayed either by his love or the one who sought to win her over. Good images.

[Enigma]

Nice write!! Flowed well, was short and to the point...
I'll suggest you re-read the lines once again because I encountered a few errors...
Overall, it was a nice job! You said what you wanted to say...
Well Done...!!