if i'd leave

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 If i'd leave tomorrow
who would even care
no one would feel sorrow
because theres no one there

if i'd leave tomorrow
would i care to see
if anyone would notice
that the dead girl is me

if i'd leave tomorrow
would they shed a tear
or would they live like
i was never here

if i'd leave tomorrow
would i be at peace
or when i died
would life just merely cease

if i'd leave tomorrow
would it stop the pain
or would the hurt just follow
and i would die in vain

if i'd leave tomorrow 
would a smile arrive on my face
or would i just rot in the ground
and stay in this hellish place

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Brandon]

Wow, this one was done very nicely as well. I like this one alot. great job.

[ah]

wow, this was amazing, great write, i loved how easily it flows

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I like this. How you use an "epiphora" form, repeatition of word phrase at the end of several clauses. with "if i'd leave tomorrow..." i know i was feeling like not living the beginning of this year, very much so, so I understand your emotions in this piece.

i added you as a friend, found you through baby boy's profile. may you review some of my work? you may like it.

[The Lovely Sound Of Cra..]

Aww... Jazymyne... this was really sad and depressing. I hope you're feeling better...
This was a very expressive poem and you put a lot of feeling on the words. I liked it a lot but it really made me worry. =( If you ever need to talk about anything, do send me a message.
Thanks for sharing.