One small suggestion (please ignore it if you don't like it)
The first lines do a great job at explaining the "void" . However, your emotion to it is limited only at the part with "suffocating". I would like to see how this turns out if you could somehow expand there. More on how you feel rather than just see.
Regardless, enjoyed it. Possibly relates to many out there.
Amazing play with words! The sheer imagery of a man/woman stuck in a void is deep and oftentimes frightening -- but can also be comforting, given time!
One small suggestion (please ignore it if you don't like it)
The first lines do a great job at explaining the "void" . However, your emotion to it is limited only at the part with "suffocating". I would like to see how this turns out if you could somehow expand there. More on how you feel rather than just see.
Regardless, enjoyed it. Possibly relates to many out there.
Hmmm... how should I get started? Well, my display name, StruckByLightning, is a metaphor of being struck by inspiration, because inspiration can electrify a person's mind the same way lightning can.
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