The Odyssey of a River

I wrote this poems as an "inspirer" to pick you up if you are feeling down. It is to remind you that everyone can have the strength of a river.

The river silently flows

across hills, plains, and mountains. 

A forlorn journey toward the sea

as the blue blood of the land.

It must have tripped over

ten million boulders,

yet it chuckles 

and races on

without another thought.

It must have stumbled over

a hundred thousand waterfalls,

yet it picks itself up

from the ground

and continues onward to the sea.

But once it reaches the 

safety of its haven,

it will not pause

for a single breath.

Instead it leaps back

to the start

and restarts its voyage again.

Now what surprises me

most is how the river

with its countless suffers 

and errors can still 

find the strength 

to go on.

Author's Note

This poem is a free write, so the grammar, punctuation, and capitalization is there on purpose.
The image was found on Google Images.

Reviews

[Aravind]

I must say that your poem as served its purpose. Very motivational!
Great use of the river here. I do recommend you to try adding more imagery to add to the poem's beauty.
And consider stanzas too. They might help. Regardless, I really enjoyed this poem.

The last lines from " Now what surprises me..... to go on" is really incredible!! Well thought of and very well done.

[Pottermorefan96]

Curious...I love how you express the river's journey! I love it, one of my favorite ones. You will one day be a great author!

[MOON]

As the river flows , so too your words. Good write.

[Lily Mae]

It's in the river that I have found life and it's there I will flow in death.. excellent write...xo :)

[roza]

loved the poem, but you might want to go into the details and add some descriptive words to make the poem really come to life. but overall it was a great poem and portrayed the message very well

[Shy Girl]

I so wonder the same thing...how do we continue on when we trip, stumble, fall or loose our way. This was very uplifting and extremely inspiring for me...I LOVED IT :) Strength is an amazing force to behold in any form it chooses.

[Teenage Romeo]

like a river this flows really good

[SheActsLikeSummer]

This was beautiful. I absolutely loved it. It sounds like a metaphor, telling you to pick yourself up despite the troubles you might face. This is truly a work of art.

[Daring Darling Didi]

Beautiful, inspiring, you definitely captured the similar nature of the flowing of a river and those last 6 lines...all too true. One does wonder how simple it is for a river to pick up and carry on, yet so hard for people like us to find that same strength. Great write.

[Patrick B]

Somehow I related this poem to they way humans live... Hit by one disaster, but end up picking up the pieces later on. I also love the imagery of the river and the emotions carried with it.
It was a great read. Good job!

[Michael G.]

Another good piece of writing. You made me see and feel the river. (Just one thought: I have never seen a river flow across a hill. Around, through, yes... just not across. Smiling.) Still a good write.