Waking Life

Another dream poem

 

Red 13

 

 

 

Reality is mystery

All else but an illusion

That leads us in circles

Repeating

The Reap eating

Battling

The bat and ling

Sinking

The sin king

To realize

That real lies

Surface

In a dire sea

Of destiny

 

All illusions capture

But for a moment

Only if that moment can be perceived

A far-fetched feat for us to meet

Distant stars at our feet

 

Seen through the eyes of a man blind

Only in sight

Not much else to fight

But his former self

A slave to this realm

 

The only punishment for his escape

Was transcending time and space, the cosmos at his fingertips

His message to us is this

“Children of the stars, a world

        Beyond mortal comprehension

Lies behind your eyes, clenched tight

Time is a fabrication you must fight

To reach this blissful eternity

So in truth

The only mystery is your reality”

With this said

We can lie in bed

Looking up high

Waiting silently

Wondering

Lost in this dream

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

This is quite pretty and you really capture a feeling of dreaminess and illusion. Your idea of breaking up words and replacing them with different ones to achieve the same sound is a great technique and it's highly effective in some places, although I think some of them didn't make much sense. That being said, I especially like the last few lines of the first stanza: "sinking the sin king to realize" etc. - it's a very original and thought-provoking line. Actually there are a lot of really, really nice lines - your imagery is fantastic. The subtle rhyming is a great plus too. Well done!

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

beautiful. i could feel every word you wrote. i love this type of poetry. where you have toread into it, so it's not so blatant. i do not go for poetry like that. i want to hear from the soul which doesn't have a language but a feeling