Kingdom of glass

I walk in silence, known by none, never seen by any.
My words fade away like dust in the sand, 
a kingdom made in glass, regrets in the form of cracks.
Feeling numb in this labyrinth of solitude, 
scared and confused.
I wish for a taste of sweet release, 
the devil whispers a wish granted, for endless peace.
Darkness smothers me, no one I was and no one I will be,
wash me away like dust in the sand, never forgiven nor forgotten,
a story of a nameless person in an empty coffin.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i just want to be somebody....to be recognized...

i want release from this feeling of being lost and alone...i need to feel accepted.

like this poem...second line should be "my words fade..."

but a good poem of introspection...we have all felt this at one time or another.

jacob

[jamal]

Thank you Jacob :) For the kind words, im happy you like it.

[Rob Santana]

Helluva piece here Jamal, I really like this. Oh go to our DARK REALM page. I put on the front page, hahaha.

[jamal]

wooot :O i just saw it CREEPER :D Thank you for taking the time to read and review

[MOON]

To be seen , to be heard lovely write way you convey the feeling of being unknown. Poignant write.

[jamal]

Thank you moon :)

[Blackened Soul]

Wow this is pretty awesome. I especially like that last line, a story of a nameless person in an empty coffin. Very dark and flows well. I like it!

[jamal]

Thank you Blackened soul :)

[Nami Machae]

Very nice poem. There was a very nice flow to this and i really enjoyed reading :) Good Job

[jamal]

Thank you Amanda :) i am happy you like it!

[Sir Jaykom]

Right choice of words to convey the sense of being alone.. a lil dark.. but i like it.

[jamal]

Thank you man :)

[Frieda P]

Oh this is eerily good jamal...kind of gets under your skin and grinds away. Very affecting read...love this one!

[jamal]

thank you frieda! :D what kinda of message did you get out of it ?

[Frieda P]

Someone who wants to be known and accepted for their true self...will sell their soul to the devil to achieve this...

[jamal]

good it came out the right way for once :D thank you again for the time to read review the poem :)

[Frieda P]

Oh yay! ;-)