she is an animal

She a dream,she is an animal on the dance floor,
she sends a chill down my spine as she walks by.
I second guess myself, she could be my death.
Her fun and games screams pleasure, yet unknown to the true danger,
beautiful monster, an assassin, an imposter. She a lady that stuns my very core
i am petrified by her beauty, she is type that loves to take the lead.
She a wild cat you cant tame, yet she steps in close to give me a taste of her true aim. A push against the wall,i am powerless to how she wants to express, every touch raises the heartbeat,she waits for it to explode,she holds me on the edge.
A scuttle nod for us to leave, am i following because i want to overcome a fear or is it curiosity? she grabs my hand and looks at me with those beautiful devilish eyes.as soon as i let go of her gentle grip she vanishes without any trace,
i end up calling for a cab,the image of her is stuck in my brain. When i came home, i noticed that someone had broken in the backdoor, on my way to the bedroom i found clothing on the floor, when i reached the bedroom there she was, with that devilish smile. Again she draws me in, like she has a leash around my neck.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think :D

Reviews

[Will]

Interesting. I like the way you built it up, and then just left the reader to their own devices at the end. Very nicely written. The one line that really grabbed my attention was this one: "Her fun and games screams pleasure, yet unknown to the true danger." Keep up the good work.

[jamal]

Thank you Will i am happy you liked it :)

[alexalove]

It's a very interesting read. I like it, but I did find it a little straightforward. I would possibly suggest some allusions just to add some literary depth. I still enjoy it, and it is a very powerful and strong poem overall! Good luck to you! :)

[jamal]

Thank you for your review! I will for sure think about useing allusions in the future :)

[Frieda P]

I think you should live a little and go for it! As you did here in your poetry...very seductive read, it leads you around the dance floor in just the right tempo and dips you at the end just right....nice one jamal.

[jamal]

haha yeah maybe i should live a little more :) Thank you frieda!

[Frieda P]

My pleasure ;-)

[scripted]

I think that this was a well exicuted write... you described this animal well! Your detail was great; thank you for sharing, yours truely Danielle

[jamal]

Thank you Danielle for you kind words :)

[scripted]

your welcome