Illuminating eye

Hidden message inside the poem, a friend made the hidden message so i dont even know whats hidden inside my own poem xD

             Illuminating eye.
                               
Rain man wants me to sell my soul.
               To survive?
               To be alive?

           Why should I care,
          hunger and welfare,
  dreaming about the green seed.
               False belief,
       hell is seven layers deep.

         history have foretold,
          our sins will never die,
         they will only grow old,
 
Rain man stands on the other side of the door,
     he want me to play a game,
      fear wont let me explore!
   He is known in the darkest lore.

Author's Note

Hidden message inside the poem, a friend made the hidden message so i dont even know whats hidden inside my own poem xD

Reviews

[fiery-san]

I honestly don't know the hidden message but I have to say it was a really good poem... it's a cryptic piece and a very nice flow... I couldn't help but think that the line "hell is seven layers deep" reminds me of the 7 deadly sins. Good job, jamal. ^_^

[jamal]

Thank you Fiery always good to hear from you :) You are right about the 7 deadly sins Fiery. Have you ever seen or read dante's inferno?

[fiery-san]

Not really, but I'm familiar with it...

[Frieda P]

Either the 'green seed' is envy or weed, I could be way off.... either way, it's a great read!

[jamal]

green seed = greed or root of evil xD thank you for your review Frieda P :))

[Frieda P]

*facepalm* not enough coffee yet apparently, that makes perfect sense!

[jamal]

hehe :)

[Falling Leaf.]

Sounds to me like a man succombing to greed and selfishness. Probably not right, but, aye, I tried!

[Falling Leaf.]

You know, saying that society is stupid and focused on money, history was similar mistakes in it but we ignore the lessons we should have learned. Not sure who the rain man is though. The president? The government in general?

[jamal]

First of all Thank you for your awesome review! :) Yes i want to show an ugly side also to how we can sometimes think that the easy way out is the best way :) and Rain man stands for the devil :O

[Falling Leaf.]

Ah, that makes sense! Boy was I off :P

[jamal]

btw you were right the first time ;)

[Falling Leaf.]

Oh. I guess I began to overthink it :P

[jamal]

hehe its ok :) i do that also most of the time xD

[Falling Leaf.]

:P

[}Echo{]

I love this. I really like the flow and rhyme, I cannot figure out the hidden message though... Wonderful write. :)

[jamal]

Thank you Adriana! My friend made the hidden message....I am kinda lost myself xD but i will figure it out!!

[}Echo{]

Welcomes! :) Haha, nice. :))

[rnuff]

love the 2nd stanza, this is wonderful.
Love the rhyme scheme. Not sure what the
hidden message is tho'

[jamal]

thank you! the i dont ether becasue a friend of mine did the hidden message. I dont even know the message myself... But i will try to figure it out!