Opens the Eyes

 

 

I watched as the winds
Gently shift the star-dust
To places offering hands
The taste of labor
Oranges are but tokens
Of a crest in faith
To be shed
Than corrected, truthfully
Into the imagination of dirt
As soul

 

 

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Opens the Eyes

Author's Note

The challenge was to use all ten words listed below in a poem, only using 40 words altogether

Watched, Shift, Places, Hands, Taste, Oranges, Tokens, Crest, Shed, and Corrected.

Reviews

[MOON]

Well crafted poignant write, excellent given the restrictions .

[faint smile]

very beautiful imagery, very well displayed, good write!

[Bell-lala]

Wow! This is beautiful. Such a short poem but so powerful. :) great job ^-^

[Q]

Quite the challenge, and well met! Beautiful imagery and I love the symbolism!

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Awesome display of talent :) This was gorgeous.

[Ruth]

Absolutely remarkable poem!
In awe :)
Full circle, thoughts transcend, beautifully mastered, great message!
Gorgeous :)
xoxo

[No name]

you have a true talent to be able to make such a beautiful poem with the words given. keep writing :D

[Josephine Vella.]

You have composed this so beautifully with the words given, you truly do have a talent to meld words in the divine, Josie :)