Prologue

 

 

The world was shattering, the sky was falling, the earth was spinning in circles. All I knew was that my mind was numb and my lungs were burning for air as I ran, tripping and sprawling over the loose hem of my gown. People stared in alarm as I raced down the streets, but I could barely see them. Everything was black, I couldn’t think straight, but I had to keep moving.

Once I reached the town square I knew that the edge of the forest was not far off, and sure enough the houses and churches began to fade into wilderness. I sprinted along the dirt trail with heavy footsteps, exhaustion slowly increasing. People were yelling after me, calling my name, and I struggled to block the sound and keep the dizzying images from clouding my sight. But soon I had veered off the trail, and I was disappearing into a labyrinth of trees, bushes, and wildflowers. I was running with every ounce of my strength, and yet every stride was draining my energy away. It felt like hours later before I finally collapsed onto the ground, panting, with my heart hammering rapidly in my chest.

Reviews

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This is a great start to this story, it makes the reader wonder whats going on and whats going to happen.

" it was torn and stained and wrinkled, and my opal necklace was knotted around my neck" I felt like you used too many "and"s. It in my mind made it a little amature not that this is anything amature.. You captured the moment in such a vivid way it could rival some of the best authors out there...

This was good, it drew the reader in and now it has hooked me so i will at a later time read more. Good Job.

[Forist.johnston]

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This seems abnormally familiar. I've reviewed it before. There was only one chapter, but I remember really loving it with the village and her memory loss�

Are you re-posting it?

[Samuel Dickens]

Very nice start, with a good amount of tension and action. The reader will want to turn the page.

[lauren emily]

This really captures your reading..you did a really good job on this. I could picture everything really well, and the words your used to describe everything were great.
Keep up the great work,
Lauren