The Lake

In despair, in happiness

I sat beside a lake

And shimmering, I saw reflected

My torment and heart-ache 

My soul was torn, my heart was cracked

My smile and life stolen

The light that was once life and laughter

Gone, my fear had swollen

The lake was not so clear, at once

It boiled inky black

Its clear, radiant beauty vanquished

Its surface worn and cracked

My tears fell fast as rainfall

Down my cheeks and off my chin

The world I saw before was different

This one shadowed and dim

But up I looked, and there saw you

Adrift upon the breeze

So carefree, your troubles gone

So tranquil and at ease

I looked at you and spoke

Words I never thought I'd hear

"I release you from this life" I said

And at once, you disappeared

Author's Note

I'd really appreciate any comments, looking for feedback on my work. Thanks!

Reviews

[R. L. Hill]

Wow. I say this alot, but I'm not a big fan of rhyming poetry. That having been said, I really really really like this. The images are so vibrant and clear in my mind when moving from stanza to stanza. Well done. I definitely want to keep you on my radar

[The Hampstead Poet]

Thank you so much! That really means a lot to me.

[Bob Sherunkle]

That was great.It had a lovely flow to it.Was,as I read it again,very sad.Very well written.

[The Hampstead Poet]

Thank you so much! I really appreciated your comment. I'm new to the website, and you're the first review I've gotten! It was really thoughtful.

[Bob Sherunkle]

No worries,I'm sure there will be many more!