Feelings

All I need is your happiness.
you are happy, this world seems mine.
Beautiful is everything.
'Your smile' is all I have ever wanted.
There are still miles to go but
don't know why I always stop at you.

You are sad, sadness prevails everywhere.
just to see you gives me a felling ' I too am alive'.
your presence warms the heart.
with me or without me all I want to see is happy 'you'.

My eyes long to see you.
Your smile has been my only aim.
You seem to be the only reason to live.
Heart has some space reserved for you,
I myself am unaware about.

Thinking of you, only one thing comes to mind,
' you remain happy always'.
Be mine or don't be.
That doesn't matter, what matters is your happiness.
Every time my heart beats, it echoes your name.
I will love you always, that remains to be the only universal
truth now.

Hope you understand someday.
if you don't that doesn't matter.
I will continue to praise you for the whole of my life.

You will be always there, there in my heart.
Preserved, untouched and pious.
you will be always there in my prayers
and the day I stop remembering you,
will surely be my last day .


While I am about to die, my last wish will be to see you.
Might God be having problems with all this,
but God you created heart as such.
Am I responsible?
If yes, what's my fault?

Reviews

[Tasfia Islam]

Awww....this is so touching... :) One thing I would like to suggest is reading through the work over and over again , so that u can correct the silly mistakes that seem to be quite annoying in such a wonderful poem like this. In the first stanza, forth line, 'Your smile' is all I have wanted ever. It wud sound better if it was like, 'Your smile' is all I have ever wanted.

And the most beautiful lines : and the day I stop remembering you,
will surely be my last day .

Overall, it was a lovely poem with a deep feeling which I can successively feel cuz u made it able that way......great piece of work... :) keep it up
And thank you for sharing....

Annabelle. :)

[Jamsheed Shafi]

thanks.
keep suggesting .
it was actually written in hurry, so mistakes crept embedded in it.

[Tasfia Islam]

No problem,.. :)

[solsystemtillnervsystem]

I love this, particularly the final stanza when you say, "While I am about to die, my last wish will be to see you." It's lovely, very touching. Your poetry is beautiful.

[jo]

Good poem very romantic and a little sad but l like it .
Jo.

[Wandervogel]

soooo romantic.....thanks jamsheed....

[The Black Warrior]

this is heart-felt! very lovely, vulnerable and tender!
Thank you for sharing :D

[Avinash]

The love is unconditional and does not need reciprocation in all cases. I see that feeling beautifully reflected here.

[Prabha Salimath]

The flow very quite as I feel Shafi.

Everything I mean every word shows your longing to see her happy, so nice amd apt I like it,

"That never mattered, what ever
mattered was your" I think this is not suiting in your poem
you could use " that doesn't matter, what matters is your happiness. "

I said what I feel don't take it in wrong way hope you understand. all over nice poem.

[Jamsheed Shafi]

thanks prabha.
keep suggesting your views.
thanks a lot.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Love poem, nicely expressed,,
being in love is most beautiful feeling

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Love is fascinating!!!
beautiful expressions........
i liked it!!!
:)
p.s. the flow might not be as smooth, but it could have been me!

[Jamsheed Shafi]

thanks pushkar

[Laura Lynn]

That is a good question, what fault do we have for loving someone or something, how does love materialize, what form, what shape, what jaw line, some people have more beautiful teeth, I never realized that I did not have the best smile as others, but I have to accept it and swallow my pride...that's just me though, not speaking of the soul or heart...you have lovely teeth, I bet, I didn't realize