Blind Mind

How lonely is the mind?

Are thoughts only in the mind?

Are we pall bearing

burying questions in the mind?

because the answers are hard to find.

See, we are all blind

but we still throw darts.

At a bulls eye 

an eye for an eye.

In this cruel world

It's a lie for lie.

Sometimes the truth may lie

between a thousand lies.

Indeed my first poem

May the function follow the form.

Author's Note

Rate or Review, thanks.

Reviews

[alen]

The mind indeed has many inumerating functions and gives certain value before and after witnessing progression as time moves along. The mind fills its self with unanswered questions and seperates them to its prevalance and entirity. Based on what you know and what is presented, it makes logical decisions.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

True. the mind is the most complex of senses

[Ascending]

I like this poem. It humors me to see a poem of the mind from the very thing it speaks of. We are beings of unquestionable answers, we fall prey to perception... the lies of the mind. This poem gives insight to the fact that we aren't fully aware. Beautiful.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

exactly my friend, we all fall prey to perception.. thanks for reviewing

[HeazerH]

This is very interesting. The mind is a cool subject. Thanks for writing.

[Shirlena]

I like your first poem...it's very evocative and honest, even sympathetic to the ills of the world. I like to see that trait in any poet so you are and you need to keep on writing because you already have your own unique print and a natural base. Very very nice.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

i'm flattered. I definitely will keep writing, thanks a lot

[Shirlena]

You're so welcomed :).

[Zahra]

Interesting write, nice thoughts / questions. Nicely penned. Keep writing.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

appreciate you stopping by to read. ill keep trying.

[Michael Stevens]

Very nice, if you don't MIND me saying so; ha, ha!

[Jamil Isimbabi]

thanks a lot

[lee von cleef]

The truth is inside,
It does not have to hide,
Truth can be blind
only to those who
won't set their burdens down.
Form N function.
What we live for
A form
A function
"it is not the work it is what you bring to it"

[Latifa]

an eye for an eye.
In this cruel world
It's a lie for lie.
Sometimes the truth may lie
between a thousand lies.
I love this part
Thank you for sharing the wonderful poetry.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

haha i love that part too. Im motivated to write more, thanks

[Sami Khalil]

A good poem for a first...Bravo.........................

[Jamil Isimbabi]

i'll be as good as you one day

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you kindly. You are welcome...:).....................

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well with your first poem. You open the door to question and thoughts. I recommend read the poem aloud. Help with the flow. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jamil Isimbabi]

thank you, I'm motivated to write more