Confined

i had to get my feelings out...

“Confined”

By: Jamie Williams

3-9-09

 

All this pain

All the lies

And yet I just stood by

For all this time

To let you break me

 

You didn’t think I would walk away

That I would just sit here and let you

Tear me apart little by little

Pick me up and push me back down

 

You broke down the wall that was impossible to break

And for a little while you made everything okay

But then came the excuses and continuous lies

You made loving you so confined

 

You didn’t think I would walk away

That I would just sit here and let you

Tear me apart little by little

Pick me up and push me back down

 

I kept saying it would get better

And tried to make you see how good it could be

But it’s not what you wanted

You didn’t want the happiness I gave you

 

You didn’t think I would walk away

That I would just sit here and let you

Tear me apart little by little

Pick me up and push me back down

 

And I’m the one who spent nights crying

And days I couldn’t bare to be awake

Here I am today without you

Doing better then I thought I would be

 

You didn’t think I would walk away

That I would just sit here and let you

Tear me apart little by little

Pick me up and push me back down

 

I refuse to go back to the same old thing

To let you ruin me once more

To bring me back into the darkness

I’m done with you

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

be honest please.

Reviews

[Bennett Logan]

I like the raw, emotional, defiant feel of this poem. Whatever or whoever your narrator is breaking away from, it's obviously been a long time coming. If you're looking to revise (you said to be honest), I would like to actually SEE what you're breaking away from. This impassioned little poem caught my attention, and now I want more. What brought you to this point with someone you're obviously close to? An argument? A fight? A passing comment? Betrayal? What was said? Where were you? What color were your shoes? Tell us about it -- that's the good stuff! :)

This is a fantastic poem and I think it could shine even more! That's my opinion, anyway. (Poetry, like all other literature, is completely subjective. Don't take anything people may say about it too seriously.) Having said that, I hope my suggestions can be of some assistance. Have a good one and definitely keep up the good work!

[Justin Guidroz]

Another review yay!

[Justin Guidroz]

Why am I NOT in this poem as "the light which has saved me from your hellish grasps?" :)
good poem hun, very deep, and good to get off your chest
Love ya!

[It'sLexiB47]

This poem is really....deep. I know that's knida wierd to say but it made me wish I could write things like this, things that speak to people. My poems speak to my heart but sometimes I think it's only me that understands them. I really like this poem Iit made me feel the emotion and that's kinda hard to do.