My Son.

My Son.

A Poem by Jamie

From a cold dark dream
His morning does come
Striking and silent
Through the loss of his son.

His clothes soaked in sweat
The dawn brings regret
A horrible night
He needs to forget.

The ocean rises as the angel sings
I'll hold you so close as the phone rings
My heart sings out your name
My son my only without you I am lame.

© 2015 Jamie


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Absolutely love this! Brought tears to my eyes! Thank you for sharing (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Kiana :)
This is an intriguing work of yours. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you Brit :)
Feeling that immense gut drop when the phone brings bad news. Sounds like a cold place to be. Nice job illustrating the trauma of that night

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
I enjoyed this poem as well. I liked the ryhme scheme and the metaphors

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Wonderful poem!
Love this line: ''The ocean rises as the angels sings''
Great imagination, Did enjoyed a lot this poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Awe, this poem was really heartfelt. I enjoyed the flow. It was sad, but you could see how much love there was at the same time. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you Angie :)

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Jamie
Jamie

Barnsley, United Kingdom



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Hi all! I'm new to all this but I thought I would join up and give it a try I love writing its always been one of my big passions! Mainly write poems. Any and all comments are welcome :) more..

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