If Only

One of my many poems I have wrote.

If only the skies would understand

Exactly what this world demands

It wouldn't be so blue

The clouds would not be so white

The sun would never shine it would always be moonlight.

If only she listened to what I had said

I wouldn't have found her alone in her bed

With crimson stained wrists and her eyes open wide

I held her in my arms and screamed to the sky why oh why.

If only the skies would understand

Exactly what this world demands

It wouldn't be so blue

The clouds would not be so white

The sun would never shine it would always be moonlight.

If only this glass would never empty

If only this bar would never close

If only my heart would stop beating

I would be with her forever more.

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Very peaceful free flowing piece of work, I appreciate your sharing it with us,thanks and
b-blessed!

[Jamie]

Thanks Jamestown :)

[FateDictates]

wow mesmerisingly beautiful, the tone the tempo, it made me sigh......loved it...thanks for making my night - simply in the way you managed to capture the same old with some not same new...greatt writing..curtsy bow

[Jamie]

Thank you very much for your kind review :)

[AngelEyes15]

Wow this is a beautiful poem , I felt the feelings come through very strong. One of my favorites so far (:

[Jamie]

You are too kind my friend! Thank you :)

[Koibito "Nickie" Kitsuy..]

Beautiful poem. I connected with it completely. You do have a talented gift. Great job. :)

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[L.E.Osborne]

I really enjoyed this Jamie! You're super talented. Love the opening stanza. Great job :)

[Jamie]

Thank you very much :)

[Awfulhabits]

This seriously brought tears to my eyes! i could imagine a whole world around this . beautiful word set

[Jamie]

Awww thank you so much you are too kind :) I appreciate it :)

[Konigin]

Wow. This poem was deep and resonating. I will think of it for a long time. :) I could feel the deep sorrow and anger here. Magnificent pen Jamie. :)

[Jamie]

Thank you so much :) I really appreciate it :)

[Konigin]

You're welcome. :)

[misha]

Beautiful flow. Great job!!

[Jamie]

Thank you for your review :)

[misha]

You are welcome :-)

[Lola_Bee]

sadly beautiful and haunting indeed. love it

[Jamie]

Thank you :) it means a lot :)

[Emily]

This is so deep. Brough a lot of emotion to not only my mind, but my eyes. Great job on this you truly are talented never forget that.

[Jamie]

Thank you :) You are too kind :) it is much appreciated!