...

Alone she sits

No words may pass her lips

For she is thinking

Letting her thoughts take over

Of coarse we all know her thoughts are no longer good

No more fairytales and happiness inside her mind

But instead in her mind she sits alone in a corner bathed in darkness

She sits and listens to the other her  tell her all that is wrong and all that will go wrong

She listens closly to all that spills from her evil mouth

Outside I, I mean, she just smiles she just pretends it's all okay

But inside she is dying she is crying

But she tries to deal with it

But we all know one day it will all be too much for her

We all know that eventually she will just give up and it will consume her

And that one day she will just....

BANG!!!!!!

Looks like that day came sooner then expected

 

 

Author's Note

think about it

Reviews

[Lorraine]

It seems to me like a short story written in the structure of a poem. I thought about it for awhile but I'm not really sure what I'm supposed to be saying. This poem is a bit tragic in a sense that the girl is in too much sadness but I feel like the 'bang' in the second to the last line holds something promising. I believe that exploding is a way of lessening the pain, if not totally freeing it. And that when the girl exploded, it was her heart's way of asking for help, like an indirect call for someone. Now, I'm thinking. Although I'm not really sure if I'm making any sense. Anyway, your poem is good. Relating feelings with fairytales and eventually placing a tiny twist at the end, is a good ending. Great Job.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Collect-Eye]

I am thinking about it..and I am sad. this is how I feel..
and this poem is how you feel..
They're feelings, Jamie. I'm trying to choose my words carefully, but it's kind of hard.
I'm trying to sit here and slow down and be calm.
your thoughts and feelings are beyopnd your control..but your decisions are yours and yours alone..you can choose to grow from them or you can choose to wither.
Decisions are more important than feelings and thoughts..which come and go like the wind..but your choices are what really guide your destiny..if you choose to learn from your feelings and your circumstances.
Emotions are a source of life..but they can feel like death..I have and will give all the love I can

[Aekmy]

This is really sad. D:
Just remember the people who love you, like family and friends.

-Madeline

[Vansgirlrocks]

dang...
I wonder who's "evil mouth"
your talking about??
I can guess haha
but yeah
this is like pretty sad

[-La dee dah- Ski]

You know I'm here, right? Talk to me.