Elements

An honest attempt to describe each of the five elements as I perceive them to be

The door bang opened!
You came from outside.
A cool breeze,
Touched me inside!
You came for a reason...
Though,it was only for a season!
I call you the 'WIND'!
Carrying messages of changes undefined!

Drop by drop ocean was formed...
Holding treasures,in it's depths of enormous norm.
Flow was the only one predominant!
No matter what came n went!
You,always made ways to keep the course...
Imparting new ideas and source!
I call you 'WATER'
Present as life,in every matter.

An unmistaken red glow was in those eyes,
Alas!'Twas not love but only lies.
Lust is embedded in the heat of desire…
Caution is the lesson one should acquire!
Burn,is what you give to the hearts,
To make them tough as the next adventure starts!
I call you 'FIRE'
Testing souls to farthest tier!

Saving a lil’ life never seemed so beautiful,
A simple gesture so honest and truthful.
Fresh ideas nurtured to great creation,
Time giving its due heartfelt appreciation!
Life is what germinates from you!
Love n care, all seem so true.
I call you 'EARTH'!
Raising hope in even barren berth.

Only you have the power to bind each of them,
Each one alone is otherwise lame!
With a true touch, you gather n heal a spirit,
Inducing the sense of what is wrong n right!
You are the one, whose presense is becoming few,
But we cannot, live without you.
I call you 'SOUL'
Awakening conscience is whose most vital role!

Author's Note

How do you like the poem??

Reviews

[Deepayan]

Really liked the concept and the way it is described. Sometimes it becomes essential to transcend reality from imaginations. You have successfully done that and now we can converge from these five points so that we can all meet as a united SOUL.

[Raj]

"I call you the 'WIND'!
Carrying messages of changes undefined!"

These lines should have been enough in the opening for the Wind. You can, when time permits, make this poem shorter and compact. If you notice, there are two beautiful lines you have written about every element. You may just keep those instead of long winding one. Anyway, let me try to dissect further...

" it's depths of enormous norm."

Here, "it's" would be "its", because gramattically if you put "it's" it means "it is."

"An unmistaken red glow was in those eyes,
Alas!'Twas not love but only lies.
Lust is embedded in the heat of desire�
Caution is the lesson one should acquire!
Burn,is what you give to the hearts,
To make them tough as the next adventure starts!
I call you 'FIRE'
Testing souls to farthest tier!"

There is Poetry and Fact in the above-mentioned stanza. This makes you a poet I admire.

Carry on. Give us more.