Nocturnal

How vast is your memory?
Is it large enough to hold a sea of useless things,
but still not big enough to remember me?

Author's Note

I'm interested in hearing about anything that need improvement.

Reviews

[Brooklyn]

You should have named it Nocturnal Emissions, then you could have made a funny pun in their about, the sea leaking out hehe ;)

[jake]

Ha, I could! I actually put this one up under the wrong name by accident and just haven't fixed it yet :p

[Marie]

I understand perfectly what youre saying. Jacob erin-cilberto is a fine poet, certainly better than I am, but I like the word "big."

I personally wish you had made it a senyru.

[Rene Salinas]

In the context given by the theme would you want to describe memory's selective nature? After all that's what you are pointing towards. Words that would relate to "emotional selection". Extensive & Prodigious maybe given this concept...

It is hard to get inside your original intention though.

Thank you

[RT Belle]

I think this is a beautiful piece of writing. It makes me sad but also reflective.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like this, jake....only suggestion might be exchanging "big" in first line for something like "inclusive"
but very good idea expressed in the three short lines.

[jake]

would something like "vast" work there?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think so, yes.

[jake]

awesome, thanks again!