The Realm of Dreams

Wrote this at college today out of complete boredom. What's that tell you about the college experience? XD

Take my hand and hold on tight;
We're exploring time and space tonight.
Seeing things we've yet to see,
Just close your eyes and follow me.

 

We'll travel upwards toward the stars;
We'll visit places near and far.
Discover things that weren't before,
Go through each locked and open door.

 

We'll learn of people from the past,
See mountains tall and deserts vast.
Get lost within our favorite book,
Get lost within a lover's look.

 

We'll fly higher than the highest cloud,
We'll see old friends that weren't around.
Try new things that once seemed too hard,
Explore our very own backyard.

 

Create adventures all our own,
We'll know things that were once unknown.
Try out for our old high school play.
Put off that test just one more day.

 

We'll relive memories, good and bad.
Make up with dear old mom and dad.
Escape our stress, escape our hell,
Escape the problems we won't tell.

 

So close your eyes and take my hand,
Get read for an all-new land.
Experience an all-new scene.
Get lost within the realm of dreams.

 

November, 2009

Author's Note

Soooo... whatcha think...?

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

This has such a wonderful dreamish quality, and takes us on a journey not only of fantasy but into the reality of relationships and life as well. It was an absolute delight to read! (Saw your intro. After college I worked in a financial aid office for years... Glad you're inspired to write when you're bored!)

[The Scanners See Sound]

The content of this poem gave so much room for abstract, or slipstream prose, yet it was disappointingly direct and lighthearted.

Well written, of course, but considering the subject matter, it was just too 'on the nose'.

[Charles]

This is a wonderful poem about exploring... letting go... loving. The rhyming in much of modern poetry is forced; this is not - everything flows nicely. It's nice that you take your readers on both physical and intellectual journeys - and all in such a short poem. I think the middle two lines of the 4th stanza are a bit rough; the rhyme is good, but the meter seems off somehow (maybe it's just the second line). Great stuff - I'll be reading more of your writing as I cruise into the holidays.

[Jessie]

I think this is a great write! a dream state which such imagination that takes you away! thanks so much for sharing, I really enjoyed...tc